for Poems of my Heart11/30/2009 c1 BartholomewCubbins
Even though it's free verse, work a little bit more on your rhythm. You did a really nice job expressing yourself and I particularly liked the emotions you portrayed. Also, to attract more readers, work on your summaries a bit. Nice job though, I enjoyed them :)
Even though it's free verse, work a little bit more on your rhythm. You did a really nice job expressing yourself and I particularly liked the emotions you portrayed. Also, to attract more readers, work on your summaries a bit. Nice job though, I enjoyed them :)
11/23/2009 c1 
12Broken-Angel-1994
Hi there. This was good,and I think the short lines made it better. Sweet and I feel the emotion. Good job!
12Broken-Angel-1994Hi there. This was good,and I think the short lines made it better. Sweet and I feel the emotion. Good job!
8/10/2009 c1 2Paradis
Wow, these are cool :3 I particularly like the first one, the two ending lines are really good. Nice job :)
2ParadisWow, these are cool :3 I particularly like the first one, the two ending lines are really good. Nice job :)
7/31/2009 c1 Energetic Lover
Um, you should remember even though free verse has no natural or forced rhyme, it still has a rhythm to it. Reading, I can't find a rhythm that works with any of them at all, not an obvious one anyway. It seems clunky...?
If you enjoy writing poetry, you should read up on some good poets and see their work and don't try to mimic it but learn a little more about meters and such. Even though it doesn't make it seem like you're expressing yourself however you want, the more you know, the more you can express.
Um, you should remember even though free verse has no natural or forced rhyme, it still has a rhythm to it. Reading, I can't find a rhythm that works with any of them at all, not an obvious one anyway. It seems clunky...?
If you enjoy writing poetry, you should read up on some good poets and see their work and don't try to mimic it but learn a little more about meters and such. Even though it doesn't make it seem like you're expressing yourself however you want, the more you know, the more you can express.