for Restrain Yourself8/9/2009 c1 
612simpleplan13
The first two lines are great. Really funny. Well, not funny reading the A/N, but the contradiction is amusing and catches you off guard. I also like the one hit wonder line.
"Restrain yourself/For I can only keep mine for so long"... the last line refers backing to retraining so it should be "I can only do so for so long" or something.
My only issue is I think it needs more. What crusade? Where does perfection come in? I dunno it seemed like it needed more details and connection between the lines. Still really nicely done.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (links in my profile).
612simpleplan13The first two lines are great. Really funny. Well, not funny reading the A/N, but the contradiction is amusing and catches you off guard. I also like the one hit wonder line.
"Restrain yourself/For I can only keep mine for so long"... the last line refers backing to retraining so it should be "I can only do so for so long" or something.
My only issue is I think it needs more. What crusade? Where does perfection come in? I dunno it seemed like it needed more details and connection between the lines. Still really nicely done.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (links in my profile).