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10/2/2010 c27 9Kinjirareta Ai
This story was Fantastic. It's a perfect mix of passion and emotion. Everything was done wonderfully including the plot and the characters. It's truly amazing! I enjoyed it to the fullest and even find myself wanting to read it again. Thank you, it's a definite Favorite!
9/30/2010 c1 L in Columbus Ohio
I LOVED LOVED LOVED Thoughtless! It was so well-written and descriptive! I went through a whirlwind of emotions as I read and my friends teased me because I couldn't put it down. Its a fast read and keeps you on the edge of your seat.
9/30/2010 c1 hayleytibbs
Love love love this book, my favourite so far, I have read this like 3 times in as many weeks hehe :)I have recently read the original ending and I am so happy you decided to change it, i so wanted Kiera and Kellan to be together...Would love a follow on story? :D xx
9/20/2010 c27 xkcbby
I want to cry. I'm so bloody overwhelmed with sadness I feel masochistic. Some sadist this story is. I cannot begin to imagine what Collision Course will be like since you warned us to bring out the tissues for that. This story had no warning, and I'm already flushed. I will be honest and say that the beginning was not the most intriguing introduction I've read, but I appraised your grammar and language. I can't find anything to fix; I just don't think it's (the beginning) a total attention grabber. Don't take this wrong, because I loved every part of it. For those of you reading this and wondering-it is definitely not a bore. I cannot dream of combining bore and Thoughtless in the same sentence. Perhaps it's because the very passion in the next chapters set the contrast. I can't say it is the most memorable, but I can say that I will never look at blue eyes and guitars the same way again.

I wish I could say more, but I can only give a story its fair share.
9/20/2010 c27 3AJS
Ugh my mouse is messing up so I accidentally submitted my last review/rant before I could finish, haha. Well yeah a lot of points in this story I actually would ask myself why I was still reading this because it was just excruciating to read about how someone could be so freaking dumb and selfish - she obviously didn't love Denny because if that was true love (like in love) then she would have known that Denny deserved a lot better than what he was getting and just because she "stayed" with him didn't mean he actually had her and would be happy. Denny really did deserve to be happy. I don't know. And for the longest time it just didn't make any sense at all. She never even paid attention to Denny or got any joy out of being with Denny - it was pretty no-brainer who she was in love with and attracted to and everything else. I guess what really made me stay and keep reading this though was their relationship. I really really believed in Kellan & Kiera and I really wanted to see them finally get together and be able to express their affections for one another publicly. I guess that's why I stayed. I think over the course of the story, your writing style improved too. I think it was some point in your story when I noticed it was better, and it seemed less like you were just telling a bedtime tale and actually more like a story that was happening right then and now. I think because of that initial disconnect it was hard to feel for the characters, aside from just being in disbelief at how stupid Kiera could be. It was hard to really get into the story when it was all told in a kind of detatched manner, like you were just telling the events and not actually showing them.

Was Kiera really 21 years old? I think she needed to grow up a little. She acted maybe 18 but not 21... Also is she a year older or something? Usually you're 21 going into your senior year of college, not junior. I think at times in the beginning Denny also irked me too, since he was so rash about his decisions and he just made them all without consulting Kiert about any of it.

Also, how old was Kellan and the other guys in this story? I don't think that was ever mentioned. Well congrats on winning Skow. I guess this was like a love/hate story that I wanted to stop reading because it was painful to continue but I couldn't bring myself to, and I just wanted to see that happy ending when she finally made up her mind. I do like the ending, and I think the story itself has progressed as well, both in writing and in characters. I like that Kiera was able to finally grow up in the end, take some time to herself to really get things organized and learn to live without anyone for a while, and just on her own. I think that was pretty crucial too. Sometimes you really do just need your alone time to figure out what exactly it is you want. I think that was one of her mistakes too - in the midst of all the chaos, she never really had time just to herself to actually think about things without this boy or that boy's influence.

I know you're editing this piece right now and I guess I can't really say I gave much feedback other than the character flaws you intentionally put into your characters. I guess for a while it just seemed like Kiera really did have no redeeming qualities anyway and it didn't make much sense that Kellan would be so enraptured with her. I know you explained it towards the end but... I don't know. Just because she was the first person she saw who could love? I don't know. It seems like it could have been anyone or something, it just happened to be her first. And even though in words in makes sense... I guess thinking about it somehow, sometimes it still doesn't. It's also kind of odd that, even though Kellan said he changed after seeing Kiera and Denny together, it doesn't make sense that he would have changed instantaneously, so that they didn't witness even the tail end of his previous lifestyle even in the beginning.

I also wonder when Denny began to suspect everything - that is interesting to think about for me. Anyway I'll stop writing and rambling. Once again, congrats on Skow! That's great that your first story you wrote ended up being such a success.

- Alyssa
9/20/2010 c26 AJS
Honestly, I hated Kiera for most of this story. Honestly she was just so goddamn stupid a lot of the times. I really liked her after the whole thing blew over though and she really started to face reality and grow up. I think Denny coming clean about everything played a major role in that, actually. But before she was just so... stupid. Like she really needed JENNY to tell her that she had to choose? She couldn't figure that out herself? And when she admitted to Kellan that she loved him, I thought that was it, that meant she was going to leave Denny for him, and then she goes and says that maybe she can keep them both. I wanted to just slap her. And yeah I understand her grief and her inabil
9/20/2010 c27 5Fayre Meira
It baffles me completely how you do not have more reviews! Your writing is terrific. So passionate, and your characters are quite memorable. Kellan practically breathes off the pages (or computer screen)!

I totally dig this story, and I hope you don't quit writing. Ever.

take care,

amaryllis
9/18/2010 c26 1Candescence
This is a wonderful story. It made me angry, laugh, and cry. I hated how Kiera kept leading both guys on like that; sh should've told Denny around the time he came back. I feel so bad for him. I think Kellan was kind of out of character in the end, though. Anyways, congrats on completing this and making this plot yours.
9/12/2010 c1 2xxcubanangelxx
I really hope you know this is an amazing story, I have read it over countless of times and the end still brings tears to my eyes (hey that rhymed! :D) Anyways it is AMAZING as I have said and I love it so much, it is just one of THOSE stories, the list of stories you have memorized and always go back to. I just haven't had a chance to review it so I feel guilty... I will try and review each chapter, just not now cuz it is really late and I have an essay due for tomorrow...

Love your stories :)
9/10/2010 c27 2euphorictragedy
Wow another amazing story! Once again, thank you for sharing this. You made me cry, again, lol. I don't think a story has ever made me feel so many emotions before. You're an amazing write, plain and simple.
9/5/2010 c26 med
you have no idea how many times my heart clenched for this story. It is just too good man!

it's now 6 in the morning. i started at about a2 midnight. yea, i'm kinda a slow reader. congrats on getting the sKow award. You totally deserve it!
9/2/2010 c27 InnocentHell
Uhm...wow, finally. that's all I can say for now O_O
9/2/2010 c23 InnocentHell
I really really reallyx100 or more hate Kiera right now
8/23/2010 c26 FauxAfflictions
Great Story:)
8/22/2010 c27 4lissalee
Just to say, I voted for you just in the nick of time! The day before voting shut.

I really enjoyed it. I wish I could write a longer review that you deserve, and I really do believe you deserve more review than you've got, but all I can say it that I completely adore this story.

What a tearjerker, yes it really did make me cry. Oh God, I sound like an idiot now XD.

But yeah, I love this little triange between them all and her indecisivness. Usually in stories, characters choose too easily or it is very easy to tell who they will definitely choose, but in your story you gave something unexpected, she actually did choose the one she had always been with and I was surprised. SO yeah, way to keep me on my toes! This story should've been nominated for best Triangle. I think I'll do that for next time!

Oh yeah, that tattoo thing was great. And the scene in the rain- AH-MAZING. And I love the reaction Denny gave to it, it was all 'yeah, I could tell, you two really love each other' and all happiness- it was realistic and I kept trying to think of ways where Denny could still be friends with them both and they could all be happy but in the end I think the way you did it was just right. The best bits though, have to be the bits where Kellan asks her to choose. I loves me a good old ultimatum! :)

I read this story in about a day, I even tried reading it on the Iipad because I was so desperate to read more. I finished reading it at about half 2 in the morning! Your story is THAT good!

Congrats on your nomination! I really think you deserve it.
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