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8/21/2010 c1 xNotxSoxInnocentx
I loved this story the first time I read it so I'm going to give it another go.
8/19/2010 c26 deadmau5Love
wow amazing. made me cry
8/17/2010 c6 2Supernova15
Hey ! Just read Chapter 6. What a good chapter... Damn girl! that scene where Kellen and Keira are watching each other during Griffin's naughty movie ;) That's hot. I love Kellen's name. And I think Keira is an interesting character so far. I'm glad she's slowly breaking away from Denny, and becoming more of her own person, and not just them as a unit anymore. Good Job! I'm excited to read more
8/12/2010 c26 MeMe
I can't even begin to tell you how amazing this story is.

I could pratically feel the love. This is beyong amazing. Wow.

I was dying for them to get together at the end, but I love how after Denny left, it wasn't all flowers and sunshine.

I wanted it to be, but it's not realistic. I loved the pain and hurt. That sounds crazy, but I think you know what I mean.

It was real.

All of that makes the love even more real.

I wish that this story wasn't over.

It's so good. I read most of it yesterday and all of today I kept thinking about it, dying to get to my computer to finish the story.

Oh and the tattoo thing... at the airport when she put his hand on the chest.. I knew right then. I remembered the conversation about him not finding anything that he wanted to mark his skin with forever... That was... just wow.

This whole story has been amazing. The character development was excellent. There was enough in the plot to keep the story continue forwards, but it was slow enough to really explore the depth of emotions.

You're an amazing writer and this is an AMAZING story :)
8/12/2010 c22 MeMe
Yes!

Thank goodness she made a choice, and the right one.

Sorry Denny. I feel so bad for him but... it wasn't meant to be.
8/12/2010 c26 mdassley
Wow. This story was amazing! You captured your characters emotions so beautifully. I absolutely loved it!
8/11/2010 c20 MeMe
I loved how he explained everything

She knows why he was so messed up

The confession was amazing
8/11/2010 c19 MeMe
Yes FINALLY

He admitted his love

Thank goodness

I was actually hoping for a big public scene full of yelling and.. well drama.

I know she loves him, she told him that she was hers... but then at the end it seems like she's not going to break up with Denny... but for a little bit I thought that she might...

Oh well, I loved this chapter. Very action packed.
8/11/2010 c18 MeMe
She doesn't even realize it but she's using Denny.

He's a good guy and she thinks that she is in love with him, but she's not, at least not anymore.

She doesn't even realize it...

I love the drama...
8/11/2010 c16 MeMe
Poor Kellan

His heart is breaking...

The emotions in this chapter were amazing

You showed true feelings, true frustration and pain.
8/11/2010 c11 MeMe
That flirting is not innocent

She is still cheating on Denny, she just needs to break up with him already!

He's a good guy and I feel bad for him but goodness. She's in love with Kellan.

Amazing as usual
8/11/2010 c9 MeMe
Oh dear

Kellan and Kiera belong together

I feel bad for Denny...

But Kellan is in so much pain too.

Amazing chapter of course

WOW
8/11/2010 c8 MeMe
This story is so good

I hate you for making Denny so nice. He's a good guy, yeah he's not perfect and yeah he didn't call her as often as he should have, but it seems like he really does care about her.

Of course I want her with Kellan though... I just feel bad for Denny

Amazing story

The emotions, the intensity of those emotions.

PERFECT!
8/11/2010 c26 AndItMovesUsAll
I cannot describe how much i love this book. It completely sucks you in and i actually had to take a lots of breaks from reading it because its so intense and there was so much angst. It literally takes you on such a rollercoaster of emotions because Kellans and Keiras relationship is so hot and cold all the time. I was crying when Denny found out about them and then when her and kellan were apart in the last few chapters. Denny is such an amzing character and is so good and i was worried at some points, about him being impossible nice,sweet and even tempered, because it wasnt realistic, he seemed too perfect, but you definately managed to pull it off, and i think the accident with Keira helped because it explained why he wasnt so angry afterwards with both of them. I really havent read something so consuming in a while, youve created some heartbreaking characters and such a passionate story, beautifully written.

You should definately consider getting this published! :D
8/9/2010 c26 2chapsticklips
I really did enjoy reading this story I think Kellan and Kiera do make a good couple, even though it was an incredibly tumultuous journey to get where they are now.. And I'm glad that Denny found someone back home that he connected with. I said this a few chapters ago but I LOVE the fact that Denny wasn't made out to be the bad guy as well, I think that would have been incredibly cliche and it made the guilt/shame that the characters went through even more poignant, after all he was just a innocent guy that was betrayed by two people he had trust in. I also liked the fact that right up until the end, Kellan and Keira didn't get together straight away, they too had issues that they had to overcome before they could trust one another not to hurt each other. To be honest, I kind of delighted in the fact that Keira was miserable for those months after Denny left and Kellan made her move out, I think I kinda had issues with her morality, she was pretty selfish in leading both boys on for so long, if anything she should have moved out for a little while to get her head straight, but she is after all a fictional character and she wouldn't take advice from the likes of me lol. Although she felt remorse and guilt over her actions, I felt that when she was feeling like that one of the boys would be there to comfort her, and in turn she would push them away or punish them, so at times I disliked that she could get away with the cheating and then have the gall to make Denny especially feel inferior and unwanted. At times she was repelled by the idea of becoming physical with him, but continued their relationship giving him hope. So I think what I'm trying to say is that her hot and cold behaviour made me dislike her sense of character and made it harder for me to sympathise with her character when she was being especially selfish.

I think at times that chapters went for too long, if you ever edited this I would look seriously at what parts are necessary and what parts aren't, sometimes the low-points were boring and tedious, I wish the characters would do more than just sit around drinking coffee of a morning or sitting really close on the lounge chair, perhaps you could do this by expanding on Kieras life at school, give her friends there that were seperate from the band, the only thing we really did see at her school was those annoying band stalkers girls who I wanted to shoot in the head on more than one occassion. Perhaps the band could tour aroundlocally or something, the description on your profile says that that Kellan is a 'local rock star' well if he is change it up and make the D-Bags more involved in the rock scene, surely in a city of Seattle, to be famous they would need to have a range of gigs in different bars each week. I think that some of the characters which you did have in the story needed to be developed to a greater degree, with the band members I got the sleazy guy, the shy-ish one but I cant remember what the other one was, so maybe if you incorporated the lesser characters in it I would have a greater knowledge of them, also the character Emma who was a waitress that got transferred onto Kiera's shift, I didn't really see the significance of that, I know it's only tiny things that probably don't seem interesting or even worth mentioning but if insignificant things were cut out then it would allow for other characters to have more time to develop and allows us to not focus on the minute details that aren't pressing to the storyline. Anyway, those are a few suggestions, take em or leave em. I did enjoy the story, thanks for posting on fp.
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