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8/22/2009 c1 kodkvnnrjgn
This is a great start! Jane seems to have troubles in her life, just like the typical teenager. She seems very honest, with her descriptions of family life.

My only suggestion is that you read through your story, and add some more punctuation. There are spots in the beginning, where run on sentences mess with the flow of things.

This is an interesting plot so far. Hope you update soon! :)

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