for Do I Laugh or Cry?1/16/2014 c18 
2toshica
I was listening to the perfect song for this chapter.
The Death Set- Beau Velasco. It's not everyone's taste but I thought it was a very good song that concluded the chapter and story.
I was sceptical about this, but I ended up enjoying every bit of it. Great story :)
2toshicaI was listening to the perfect song for this chapter.
The Death Set- Beau Velasco. It's not everyone's taste but I thought it was a very good song that concluded the chapter and story.
I was sceptical about this, but I ended up enjoying every bit of it. Great story :)
4/18/2013 c18 1somethingleftdesired
Just a perfect ending to a brilliant story. I loved every word of this fic!
1somethingleftdesiredJust a perfect ending to a brilliant story. I loved every word of this fic!
4/15/2013 c9 somethingleftdesired
This is the first story I've read since signing up to Fiction Press, and I absolutely love it! This chapter is definitely my favourite out of all I've read so far! :)
This is the first story I've read since signing up to Fiction Press, and I absolutely love it! This chapter is definitely my favourite out of all I've read so far! :)
2/18/2012 c2 You're-mine-not-ashley's
From the name I made up you can most probably guess who this is :P
Just literally started browsing the inbox in my other account and stumbled accross this. It's absolutely awesome so far wifey XD
If I read on to find you've abandoned it then I shall find you and destroy you.
Love u loads, my horny cripple
Your "emo" xx
From the name I made up you can most probably guess who this is :P
Just literally started browsing the inbox in my other account and stumbled accross this. It's absolutely awesome so far wifey XD
If I read on to find you've abandoned it then I shall find you and destroy you.
Love u loads, my horny cripple
Your "emo" xx
10/16/2011 c18 flunkybubbleshorts
That was a fun story :)
I liked how you involved so many different characters and they all had their own role to play..
Plus the main 3 characters were quite well developed.
Keep writing!
That was a fun story :)
I liked how you involved so many different characters and they all had their own role to play..
Plus the main 3 characters were quite well developed.
Keep writing!
10/16/2010 c1 3HPRK08
Exciting start! I'm really intrigued as to what this will come to, great start!
~HPRK
3HPRK08Exciting start! I'm really intrigued as to what this will come to, great start!
~HPRK
10/1/2010 c15 9Sakina the Fallen Angel
OMG this chapter was so unbelievably made of win! You can totally see Tia trying to redeem herself, but man, she's done a lot of selfish stuff, all of it oh so realistic too, which makes her all the more scary. But...now the way is clear...will this story have a happy ending? :O
~ Sakina x
9Sakina the Fallen AngelOMG this chapter was so unbelievably made of win! You can totally see Tia trying to redeem herself, but man, she's done a lot of selfish stuff, all of it oh so realistic too, which makes her all the more scary. But...now the way is clear...will this story have a happy ending? :O
~ Sakina x
10/1/2010 c14 Sakina the Fallen Angel
Thought this chapter was great as always, and yes, it did fill in a lot of the blanks. Wow, didn't know Tia had it in her to react this badly, but, I guess she's still human underneath all that nastiness. Didn't know your other reviewers hate Ben, hehe! But yeah, I think you portrayed him really realistically throughout this story, and the possible explanation for why he and Tia are together does make sense :)
Edits:
I pulled out [a] small box, took a glance at the packaging and nearly cried with delight.
"Do you think they have one?" [should it be "have done"]
"You know how [your] mum went home to get washed up and stuff?"
I sighed, feeling every iota of longing come rushing back as I [thought] of Ben.
~ Sakina x
Thought this chapter was great as always, and yes, it did fill in a lot of the blanks. Wow, didn't know Tia had it in her to react this badly, but, I guess she's still human underneath all that nastiness. Didn't know your other reviewers hate Ben, hehe! But yeah, I think you portrayed him really realistically throughout this story, and the possible explanation for why he and Tia are together does make sense :)
Edits:
I pulled out [a] small box, took a glance at the packaging and nearly cried with delight.
"Do you think they have one?" [should it be "have done"]
"You know how [your] mum went home to get washed up and stuff?"
I sighed, feeling every iota of longing come rushing back as I [thought] of Ben.
~ Sakina x
10/1/2010 c13 Sakina the Fallen Angel
D'oh. I thought the summary was one of those fancy airy fairy metaphorical ones...bad me.
Laughed at this line: "Worry can do strange things to a woman's hair."
Ach, the angst here is killing me!
No concrit or anything, so onto the next chapter!
~ Sakina x
D'oh. I thought the summary was one of those fancy airy fairy metaphorical ones...bad me.
Laughed at this line: "Worry can do strange things to a woman's hair."
Ach, the angst here is killing me!
No concrit or anything, so onto the next chapter!
~ Sakina x
10/1/2010 c12 Sakina the Fallen Angel
Huh, thought I'd left a review for this chappy. Anyhow, loved Mia's inner monologue on her panic over going blind! xDD
Urk, Ben and Mia are just not meant to be, from the looks of it... :(
~ Sakina x
Huh, thought I'd left a review for this chappy. Anyhow, loved Mia's inner monologue on her panic over going blind! xDD
Urk, Ben and Mia are just not meant to be, from the looks of it... :(
~ Sakina x
9/29/2010 c11 Sakina the Fallen Angel
OH NOES.
I could see it coming...I knew it was coming, but still.
ARGH.
Words cannot express how much I hate Tia right now!1!11
Man, this chapter was so epic, and as always, I myself hooked and laughing out loud, like at the James Bond comment. When Kelly talked about the boom, I knew that some serious shzz was gonna go down. Gods, the argument at the end, and Mia's reaction; you wrote those so well.
Edits:
[Ben's] dark eyes narrowed in annoyance as he looked past me to glare up at Tia
"Okay, everyone[,]" Kelly called suddenly
sending up a great plume of water has he vanished into the sea. [didn't make sense]
~ Sakina x
OH NOES.
I could see it coming...I knew it was coming, but still.
ARGH.
Words cannot express how much I hate Tia right now!1!11
Man, this chapter was so epic, and as always, I myself hooked and laughing out loud, like at the James Bond comment. When Kelly talked about the boom, I knew that some serious shzz was gonna go down. Gods, the argument at the end, and Mia's reaction; you wrote those so well.
Edits:
[Ben's] dark eyes narrowed in annoyance as he looked past me to glare up at Tia
"Okay, everyone[,]" Kelly called suddenly
sending up a great plume of water has he vanished into the sea. [didn't make sense]
~ Sakina x