for Knight Shift1/20/2010 c1 
14its.Nothing.Special
AHH BEST EVER! hahha super creative and cute. love refreshing new situations like this. great writing and great story!
;)becky
14its.Nothing.SpecialAHH BEST EVER! hahha super creative and cute. love refreshing new situations like this. great writing and great story!
;)becky
9/13/2009 c1 8AKAAKAAKA
I love this story, at first I thought it would suck (sorry, the result of being let down lately by so interesting but...well...grammar and dialogue wise...disappointing. But when I read it, I went Kya!...You made me sleep late cause I was playing it in my head DX.
Anyway, I just want to say a few things:
1.) Try to break the paragraphs a bit more, as the reading through a screen isn't really fun especially if you have to concentrate a bit more. So making it one or three lines then break would be a good style.
2.) Thank you for not giving the physical features of the character, it gives the reader a chance to imagine them themselves, and it works very well to your advantage and writing style.
3.) Dialogue is wonderful! *hugs* and using song titles as mediums of emotion was a nice touch. The best part is, you didn't place in lyrics ! ^^
Soo all in all! You're now a favorite author from another a romance fan! XD
8AKAAKAAKAI love this story, at first I thought it would suck (sorry, the result of being let down lately by so interesting but...well...grammar and dialogue wise...disappointing. But when I read it, I went Kya!...You made me sleep late cause I was playing it in my head DX.
Anyway, I just want to say a few things:
1.) Try to break the paragraphs a bit more, as the reading through a screen isn't really fun especially if you have to concentrate a bit more. So making it one or three lines then break would be a good style.
2.) Thank you for not giving the physical features of the character, it gives the reader a chance to imagine them themselves, and it works very well to your advantage and writing style.
3.) Dialogue is wonderful! *hugs* and using song titles as mediums of emotion was a nice touch. The best part is, you didn't place in lyrics ! ^^
Soo all in all! You're now a favorite author from another a romance fan! XD
9/8/2009 c1 HarderTpBreathe
That was great ! :D
I absolutely loved it. and Beth was his savior :P
good job! :]
That was great ! :D
I absolutely loved it. and Beth was his savior :P
good job! :]
9/5/2009 c1 8JamieBell
Gorgeous. Simply gorgeous! I could feel the heartbreak and the happy. So good. Thank you!
8JamieBellGorgeous. Simply gorgeous! I could feel the heartbreak and the happy. So good. Thank you!
8/31/2009 c1 4jessnutsss
OMG. You really have a knack for writing something new and refreshing! Loved it :)
4jessnutsssOMG. You really have a knack for writing something new and refreshing! Loved it :)
8/31/2009 c1 4Eyes.BehindtheMask
OMG this is such a cute story! I absolutely love it! The first thing I did after reading it (and, I'll admit, after squealing) was favorite it! Absolute awesomeness!
4Eyes.BehindtheMaskOMG this is such a cute story! I absolutely love it! The first thing I did after reading it (and, I'll admit, after squealing) was favorite it! Absolute awesomeness!
8/31/2009 c1 MarieAnn
Really good story! I definitely liked it and I thought the ending was perfect. :-)
Really good story! I definitely liked it and I thought the ending was perfect. :-)
8/31/2009 c1 Jade
Dude, I loved this story. Seriously, it's really awesome. (Especially the ending.) I liked how Beth called in and told him that she wanted him back by requesting a song called "I want you back." That was really smart.
Dude, I loved this story. Seriously, it's really awesome. (Especially the ending.) I liked how Beth called in and told him that she wanted him back by requesting a song called "I want you back." That was really smart.