9/2/2009 c1 my own prince
Right now, I can say that it's well written. There are no jarring mistakes in grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc. And hey, the writing is smooth too. The only problem that I can find is that it doesn't have a particular... well, 'pull' to it that may want to draw me in to read the next chapter. Maybe if you added some twist or a glimpse into the story's plot, it could make readers curious to continue reading it. :)