for Stole A Kiss, Stole My Heart1/20/2010 c1 
3dontneedyou
Hey! I really like Brenton, he sounds awesome already. The characters are a TAD bit hard to keep track of as they were all thrown out unexpectedly, but nevertheless, I'm really liking this story considering the first chapter. I don't have much time now, but I'm going to read the next chapters REAL soon! LOVING THIS!
-dontneedyou
3dontneedyouHey! I really like Brenton, he sounds awesome already. The characters are a TAD bit hard to keep track of as they were all thrown out unexpectedly, but nevertheless, I'm really liking this story considering the first chapter. I don't have much time now, but I'm going to read the next chapters REAL soon! LOVING THIS!
-dontneedyou
11/11/2009 c4 XxButterflyxAngelxBabygirl
That was a great chapter! So sweet! I wonder what will happen next. I hope you can continue again soon!
That was a great chapter! So sweet! I wonder what will happen next. I hope you can continue again soon!
11/9/2009 c1 misery sister
The thing is, I think you added way too many characters in one chapter for most of your readers to properly comprehend who is who and what s/he's personality is. I think it's best to space out people so everyone will have their own distinct personality, rather than just a blur.
The thing is, I think you added way too many characters in one chapter for most of your readers to properly comprehend who is who and what s/he's personality is. I think it's best to space out people so everyone will have their own distinct personality, rather than just a blur.
11/8/2009 c3 1Tigery
Jenn was being a buttwipe :(
Hope the two (not Christine and Brenton) get together! They make a cute couple so far :)
1TigeryJenn was being a buttwipe :(
Hope the two (not Christine and Brenton) get together! They make a cute couple so far :)
11/8/2009 c2 Tigery
I love their whole group! It reminds me of my friends and I (though we're much weirder). Keep up the awesomeness! :D
I love their whole group! It reminds me of my friends and I (though we're much weirder). Keep up the awesomeness! :D
11/2/2009 c3 6Andene
Jelousy! Finally...Sienna admits it...it works!
Interesting!
I hope there is more to come!
6AndeneJelousy! Finally...Sienna admits it...it works!
Interesting!
I hope there is more to come!
11/2/2009 c2 Andene
Matt or Brenton...Matt or Brenton...hm?
I pick Brenton. Clearly there's something between Brenton and Sienna...I'm not taking to Matt...probably becuase I liked Brenton first off...
The dialougue is written nicely. I believe that Sienna is a very oblivious person...well so far! It's cute.
I'm going to keep reading!
Matt or Brenton...Matt or Brenton...hm?
I pick Brenton. Clearly there's something between Brenton and Sienna...I'm not taking to Matt...probably becuase I liked Brenton first off...
The dialougue is written nicely. I believe that Sienna is a very oblivious person...well so far! It's cute.
I'm going to keep reading!
11/2/2009 c1 Andene
So far, I think the story is interesting. Although at some points I think the description is unnessecary...like 'Jenn looked down at her red dress—that matched her self confidence and outgoing personality' it sort of throws me off.
I do however love Brenton already. I'm going to read the rest.
Good job!
So far, I think the story is interesting. Although at some points I think the description is unnessecary...like 'Jenn looked down at her red dress—that matched her self confidence and outgoing personality' it sort of throws me off.
I do however love Brenton already. I'm going to read the rest.
Good job!
10/3/2009 c3 XxButterflyxAngelxBabygirl
That was a great chapter! I wonder what will happen now. It looks like she might be caught in a little love triangle with Mark and Brenton, huh? That was a great chapter! I hope you can continue again soon!
That was a great chapter! I wonder what will happen now. It looks like she might be caught in a little love triangle with Mark and Brenton, huh? That was a great chapter! I hope you can continue again soon!
10/3/2009 c3 12Miss Mysteries
Fantastic story so far. Great story plot. Its seem kinda like maybe Jenn is plotting to get Sienna and Brenton together subtly. Interesting characters.
12Miss MysteriesFantastic story so far. Great story plot. Its seem kinda like maybe Jenn is plotting to get Sienna and Brenton together subtly. Interesting characters.
10/3/2009 c2 4HighOnBrokenWings
Thumbs up!
Great chapter! Though, what did Sienna have against Matt, I though that that was a little bit cold. She could have atleast not acted really... Well... Yeah. Do you get what I'm saying? It made me think he was some creeper or something.
Great chapter overall, I'll have to read the third chapter sometime, but I've got to go now :(
Love whats going on between Sienna and Brenton :D
4HighOnBrokenWingsThumbs up!
Great chapter! Though, what did Sienna have against Matt, I though that that was a little bit cold. She could have atleast not acted really... Well... Yeah. Do you get what I'm saying? It made me think he was some creeper or something.
Great chapter overall, I'll have to read the third chapter sometime, but I've got to go now :(
Love whats going on between Sienna and Brenton :D
10/3/2009 c1 HighOnBrokenWings
Alright. Well, a couple of times you had different characters speaking all in one paragraphy line thing, which shouldnt be done, because it causes confusion. So, new paragraph everytime there's a new speaker. Hm There are a lot of characters in here, but I think I'm onto them, you track them all a lot. It seems to have moved really fast, or just shows that theyre all pretty close, Im not completely sure if you were aiming for that, but if you were, congradualation (Yeah... I spelt that wrong...) you did it! At the moment, I quite like... Brenton. But thats because most of the other characters are kinda blobby at the moment, give them punchy personality revealing lines, if you're going to have so many characters, that way it'll make them more defined, and seperate. I like it so far though, not much happening in the plot yet... But yeah, guess I'm going to see where it's heading :D
Alright. Well, a couple of times you had different characters speaking all in one paragraphy line thing, which shouldnt be done, because it causes confusion. So, new paragraph everytime there's a new speaker. Hm There are a lot of characters in here, but I think I'm onto them, you track them all a lot. It seems to have moved really fast, or just shows that theyre all pretty close, Im not completely sure if you were aiming for that, but if you were, congradualation (Yeah... I spelt that wrong...) you did it! At the moment, I quite like... Brenton. But thats because most of the other characters are kinda blobby at the moment, give them punchy personality revealing lines, if you're going to have so many characters, that way it'll make them more defined, and seperate. I like it so far though, not much happening in the plot yet... But yeah, guess I'm going to see where it's heading :D
9/27/2009 c2 XxButterflyxAngelxBabygirl
That was a great chapter! I wonder what will happen next. I hope you can continue again soon!
That was a great chapter! I wonder what will happen next. I hope you can continue again soon!
9/6/2009 c1 XxButterflyxAngelxBabygirl
I just read this. Its really good! I can't wait to find out what happens and the party and during the summer! I hope you can continue again soon!
I just read this. Its really good! I can't wait to find out what happens and the party and during the summer! I hope you can continue again soon!