for my prism9/29/2009 c1 
70rolliepollie44
Love what you did with the word soar,
very neat idea, very interesting poem, beautiful. :D
rolliepollie44
70rolliepollie44Love what you did with the word soar,
very neat idea, very interesting poem, beautiful. :D
rolliepollie44
9/27/2009 c1 124in theory
Honestly, this is a bit too stream-of-consciousness to work as a poem, in my opinion. And I don't mean that in terms of the subject, I mean it only in terms of your format choices; it's kind of vague in a way that suggests you didn't know how to express what you meant, but YOU know what you mean. This creates a bit of a problem for your average reader, that's all. I'm all for abstract poetry, but there's always some kind of tether to reality in even the strangest pieces, it seems, but here I did not see that connection.
124in theoryHonestly, this is a bit too stream-of-consciousness to work as a poem, in my opinion. And I don't mean that in terms of the subject, I mean it only in terms of your format choices; it's kind of vague in a way that suggests you didn't know how to express what you meant, but YOU know what you mean. This creates a bit of a problem for your average reader, that's all. I'm all for abstract poetry, but there's always some kind of tether to reality in even the strangest pieces, it seems, but here I did not see that connection.