for Save the Date1/3/2022 c1 echo
Is the email given a typo by chance? Is it supposed to be gmail?
Is the email given a typo by chance? Is it supposed to be gmail?
5/6/2016 c1 Guest
Are you going to publish 'Stumble' this September?
Are you going to publish 'Stumble' this September?
7/26/2014 c31 Guest
I love your story, dont get me wrong, but I guess you are a fan of James Bond, too. Your line makes me remember a line James Bond said: I have no armor left, youve stripped it from me. Whatever is left of me, Im yours.
I love your story, dont get me wrong, but I guess you are a fan of James Bond, too. Your line makes me remember a line James Bond said: I have no armor left, youve stripped it from me. Whatever is left of me, Im yours.
7/25/2014 c25 Guest
Wait that bathroom scene sounds just like James Bond comforting Vesper Lynn after they kill a man?
Wait that bathroom scene sounds just like James Bond comforting Vesper Lynn after they kill a man?
7/25/2014 c4 Guest
Pregnant haha, is that a hint?
Pregnant haha, is that a hint?
7/25/2014 c3 Guest
Oh Daniel's ideal proposal is romantoc. An English man indeed.
Oh Daniel's ideal proposal is romantoc. An English man indeed.
7/25/2014 c2 Guest
Interesting, I cant wait to continue.
Interesting, I cant wait to continue.
7/22/2014 c1 Kris ann
I jst read stumble and stop the world,i must say ur stories ar kul,smtyms i dnt feel the emotional attachment u try 2 portray but i no its there,and if i may ask,u dont seem 2 b an avid member of the christain faith,or are you jst being imaginative while talking about it,apart from the fact that i dnt lyk hw u describe my religion,am not offended if you are being imaginative and you dont mean it doh,i thnk u're pretty kul,especially wt ur a/n,you greet ur reviewers and share ur opinion on things generally..an u hav loyal readers lyk,i murder on impulse,e.t.c..nd so far not up to 7 spelling errors,way 2 go buddy
I jst read stumble and stop the world,i must say ur stories ar kul,smtyms i dnt feel the emotional attachment u try 2 portray but i no its there,and if i may ask,u dont seem 2 b an avid member of the christain faith,or are you jst being imaginative while talking about it,apart from the fact that i dnt lyk hw u describe my religion,am not offended if you are being imaginative and you dont mean it doh,i thnk u're pretty kul,especially wt ur a/n,you greet ur reviewers and share ur opinion on things generally..an u hav loyal readers lyk,i murder on impulse,e.t.c..nd so far not up to 7 spelling errors,way 2 go buddy
7/3/2014 c11 Percabethgirl2645
They are adorable together :). And also, HIS LAST NAME IS BOND?! So cool.
They are adorable together :). And also, HIS LAST NAME IS BOND?! So cool.
5/5/2014 c27 TaraElizabeth28
I really do enjoy this story but i think your getting some of the details mixed up. You've stated she was a junior but then in previous you've also said she was a sophomore. You also said that Daniel has two younger sisters in beginning chapters not an older one.
I really do enjoy this story but i think your getting some of the details mixed up. You've stated she was a junior but then in previous you've also said she was a sophomore. You also said that Daniel has two younger sisters in beginning chapters not an older one.
1/3/2014 c6 Kat
Loving the story so far but one tiny thing...Transylvania is a region not a city.
Loving the story so far but one tiny thing...Transylvania is a region not a city.
12/14/2013 c24 Mitch
I wasn't going to review until the end but I had to. This story has such a good plot line and could be completely amazing. Don't get me wrong, it's certainly good as is, I'd like to see the characters fleshed out a bit more though and perhaps more description in the actual scenes to lengthen them. The POV randomly shifts between Gemma and Dan too, which could be worked on. You might need to edit a bit more, I'm sure Daniel said he had two younger sisters in a previous chapter but now he only has one older sister. Previously Gemma said she could give up pizza and later stated she never eats pizza. Daniel said he was going to propose to Eva at one point and then later says he has never even thought about the prospect of marrying someone (which is a given that you have if you were going to propose). You also sometimes repeat things from previous chapters in future chapters. So only small issues like that which perhaps are caused by fictionpress authors such as yourself concentrating on more than one story at a time.
Anyway, I really do love the story and I think you've got some great work here. So with that said, I'm off to continue the rest of the story!
I wasn't going to review until the end but I had to. This story has such a good plot line and could be completely amazing. Don't get me wrong, it's certainly good as is, I'd like to see the characters fleshed out a bit more though and perhaps more description in the actual scenes to lengthen them. The POV randomly shifts between Gemma and Dan too, which could be worked on. You might need to edit a bit more, I'm sure Daniel said he had two younger sisters in a previous chapter but now he only has one older sister. Previously Gemma said she could give up pizza and later stated she never eats pizza. Daniel said he was going to propose to Eva at one point and then later says he has never even thought about the prospect of marrying someone (which is a given that you have if you were going to propose). You also sometimes repeat things from previous chapters in future chapters. So only small issues like that which perhaps are caused by fictionpress authors such as yourself concentrating on more than one story at a time.
Anyway, I really do love the story and I think you've got some great work here. So with that said, I'm off to continue the rest of the story!
12/5/2013 c12 ally
hmm I'm guessing it's Harvey... hmm.. we shall see!
hmm I'm guessing it's Harvey... hmm.. we shall see!