for Lucy5/27/2010 c1 
6Supernatural 101
I think you should make a chapter about the day that she actually starts to dance with them.
6Supernatural 101I think you should make a chapter about the day that she actually starts to dance with them.
11/27/2009 c1 1xenolith
Oi, this gave me goosebumps. I thought it was brilliant, a great idea and I liked how you didn't go into in anymore. It ended perfectly, with the right mix of romanticism and ambiguity. Very well done!
1xenolithOi, this gave me goosebumps. I thought it was brilliant, a great idea and I liked how you didn't go into in anymore. It ended perfectly, with the right mix of romanticism and ambiguity. Very well done!
11/26/2009 c1 6ephemeral dance
Wow. This was a very eerie, chilling piece. I absolutely loved it. I really enjoyed the imagery of the dancing shadows, especially over the head of such a frail child.
The brief conversation Lucy had with Death was well-written. It wasn't too incredibly heavy, morbid, or trying too hard to be profound. His snippy "Don't act dull, girl." was wonderful.
“Someday, years and years from now, you will be Lucy, the girl who dances with the ghosts. But for now, you need to go back to sleep.” Loved that.
Great job!
- Sarah, via the Roadhouse.
6ephemeral danceWow. This was a very eerie, chilling piece. I absolutely loved it. I really enjoyed the imagery of the dancing shadows, especially over the head of such a frail child.
The brief conversation Lucy had with Death was well-written. It wasn't too incredibly heavy, morbid, or trying too hard to be profound. His snippy "Don't act dull, girl." was wonderful.
“Someday, years and years from now, you will be Lucy, the girl who dances with the ghosts. But for now, you need to go back to sleep.” Loved that.
Great job!
- Sarah, via the Roadhouse.
11/23/2009 c1 25KelaBelle
This was a beautiful peice of work you have written everything that was described was perfect. Nice how you mad it a good ending too from like the summary you automaticly think its bad.
25KelaBelleThis was a beautiful peice of work you have written everything that was described was perfect. Nice how you mad it a good ending too from like the summary you automaticly think its bad.
11/23/2009 c1 2A. Clark
Found your story at the Roadhouse, and I gotta say, I'm really impressed! Especially since you've written it for a class.
Lucy is an adorable character, and her interaction with Death is pretty humorous. There's a very interesting, larger plot floating about behind the scene, and this story would definitely be great continued.
You've got a great writing style; hope you got an A for this!
2A. ClarkFound your story at the Roadhouse, and I gotta say, I'm really impressed! Especially since you've written it for a class.
Lucy is an adorable character, and her interaction with Death is pretty humorous. There's a very interesting, larger plot floating about behind the scene, and this story would definitely be great continued.
You've got a great writing style; hope you got an A for this!
9/19/2009 c1 54Nausikaa
I really like this. Imagery is lovely, and I especially like how Lucy compares the shadows to dark chocolate- that she isn't afraid of them though shadows and darkness are usually like the bogie man for children. I liked Death too. I think, if you ever decided to make this into something more, it would be very interesting.
54NausikaaI really like this. Imagery is lovely, and I especially like how Lucy compares the shadows to dark chocolate- that she isn't afraid of them though shadows and darkness are usually like the bogie man for children. I liked Death too. I think, if you ever decided to make this into something more, it would be very interesting.