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10/9/2009 c1 174a silenced revolution
emotionally, visually gripping with great imagery and word choice. my favourite lines are "I look across borders / And it appears that I’m looking in the mirror."

the only way i think it might be improved is if you organised it a little more, into stanzas, or added some punctuation for clarity. it just seems a little too long to be one long stream of words. just an idea though, and it's good work as is.

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