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9/22/2009 c1 Spurlunk
Yeah, it's pretty obvious that she's from a mob family, lol. And it's funny but only kinda. You might want to play up the bit about how her fiance could impress her dad a LITTLE bit more. I AM hooked, but I'd like to know more about how they met and how she told him about her family, it feels a little bit like we stepped into the middle of things. But well done overall, very well written and I will definitely be back to read more.

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