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for A Poor Investment

2/7/2010 c1 23Damien Vlashtov
Ahh, very nice. It seems perfectly honest. One critique I have is the inconsistent use of "it just feels like a bad trade". I would remove the second use of this in the third stanza. If you must repeat it, do it at the end-in its current location, it doesn't add to the flow of the piece and thus comes off as redundant. Besides this, excellent job conveying your emotion.

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