9/25/2009 c1 7Inflomora
Some suggestions:

- Change the first letter of each word in the title so that it's capital instead, ie You Can't Blame Gravity For Falling In Love (Love the name, but try to expand the story a bit so that the title actually has something to do with the story.)

- Change "da" to "the". Spell check everything.

- The story doesn't feel complete at all. Go through what you've written and hit enter a couple of times to divide it up. Right now everything is cramped together. Check some websites for some grammar tips.

Try to get a real finish to it as well. Keep trying, practice makes perfect! :)

Best of luck,

Flo