for Storm Clouds and Blue Skies9/30/2009 c2 
2xxANTONIExx
xP... woa, you updated quickly... unless you've already written the whole story already... but anyways,
xD... I'm starting to like Alex for his wit! I especially loved the bit where he said “I can say the feeling is entirely mutual”... made me smile... : )
The sexual tension and richness is done very well, yet not overdone either, which is very good. The language you used is quite sexy. I love how you brought some French into the text with the "cherie amour"... (was it French?... I hope I didn't seem too much like an idiot then... O_o...) And wow, you finally revealed the mistress's name... Vanessa... I like the ring to it... but it took me a while to actually realise that you had JUST revealed her name... xD... so I was like O_O...
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This story is filled with lust, obsession and sexual tension. Gotta love it. xD
2xxANTONIExxxP... woa, you updated quickly... unless you've already written the whole story already... but anyways,
xD... I'm starting to like Alex for his wit! I especially loved the bit where he said “I can say the feeling is entirely mutual”... made me smile... : )
The sexual tension and richness is done very well, yet not overdone either, which is very good. The language you used is quite sexy. I love how you brought some French into the text with the "cherie amour"... (was it French?... I hope I didn't seem too much like an idiot then... O_o...) And wow, you finally revealed the mistress's name... Vanessa... I like the ring to it... but it took me a while to actually realise that you had JUST revealed her name... xD... so I was like O_O...
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This story is filled with lust, obsession and sexual tension. Gotta love it. xD
9/30/2009 c2 5Mrs Prince Charming
Woot! 2nd chapter! Celebrate people!
I love the first part, truly shows off his obsession and passion for this girl. I like the dream, very visual and tasty.
Don't like Miss Victoria Paris Hilton...then again you're not meant to. xDD
Tip is, throwing in the name was still a little too sudden. Could have given more notice and reason behind Vanessa.
Theodore is adorable. Theodore is 'minee' x3
Oohh. The last part had my squirming in my seat...in the bad way. No more comments needed.
I love you baby x33.
You are pure brilliance.
5Mrs Prince CharmingWoot! 2nd chapter! Celebrate people!
I love the first part, truly shows off his obsession and passion for this girl. I like the dream, very visual and tasty.
Don't like Miss Victoria Paris Hilton...then again you're not meant to. xDD
Tip is, throwing in the name was still a little too sudden. Could have given more notice and reason behind Vanessa.
Theodore is adorable. Theodore is 'minee' x3
Oohh. The last part had my squirming in my seat...in the bad way. No more comments needed.
I love you baby x33.
You are pure brilliance.
9/30/2009 c1 Need.More.Redbull
ORAANGE!
Guess who? -bats lashes-
So far, I'm loving your characters, especially your Romeo, sanity obsession and ALL! Oomph, cocky AND witty, yet he has this cute, childlike quirk to him...though maybe that's just my weird skills of interpretation.
The despription is brilliant. The detail, the richness. Really easy to picture what's going on. The sweet innocence of the beginning, though, had to be my favourite part.
KEEP UPDATING!
We want more :C
Favourite Line:
"...his jet black hair sticking up like individual duck butts"
HAHA! The visual was soo FUNNY
ORAANGE!
Guess who? -bats lashes-
So far, I'm loving your characters, especially your Romeo, sanity obsession and ALL! Oomph, cocky AND witty, yet he has this cute, childlike quirk to him...though maybe that's just my weird skills of interpretation.
The despription is brilliant. The detail, the richness. Really easy to picture what's going on. The sweet innocence of the beginning, though, had to be my favourite part.
KEEP UPDATING!
We want more :C
Favourite Line:
"...his jet black hair sticking up like individual duck butts"
HAHA! The visual was soo FUNNY
9/27/2009 c1 2xxANTONIExx
Wow, laffytaffy! x3... I am extremely impressed and interested so far. Seeming that it's only the first chapter, I can't find anything to criticise either. :)
I love your style of description. Especially that "second skin" thing... it was very rich and sexy. x3... Ah... I also just realised that you haven't revealed the girl's name yet... interesting...
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I also love how the maids have attitude and Alex isn't a "shy gentleman" type (so far from what I could read)... When Gabby told me what your story was going to be about, I thought it was going to be something written for the Victorian Era and all... it was a nice surprise to find that it wasn't. xP... makes things less complicated... not like you wouldn't still kick ass in the Victorian era anyway...
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Overall, I am very excited for the rest of this story and am quite immersed in it so far. I love that "BULLOCKS!" bit... it was so cute... x3...
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2xxANTONIExxWow, laffytaffy! x3... I am extremely impressed and interested so far. Seeming that it's only the first chapter, I can't find anything to criticise either. :)
I love your style of description. Especially that "second skin" thing... it was very rich and sexy. x3... Ah... I also just realised that you haven't revealed the girl's name yet... interesting...
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I also love how the maids have attitude and Alex isn't a "shy gentleman" type (so far from what I could read)... When Gabby told me what your story was going to be about, I thought it was going to be something written for the Victorian Era and all... it was a nice surprise to find that it wasn't. xP... makes things less complicated... not like you wouldn't still kick ass in the Victorian era anyway...
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Overall, I am very excited for the rest of this story and am quite immersed in it so far. I love that "BULLOCKS!" bit... it was so cute... x3...
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9/27/2009 c1 Teddy
Ahahahaa I REALLY love the way your girl talks. XD
"BOLLOCKS!" && "If that's your way of trying to get into my knickers," Made me LOL XDD
Although I have to admit.. I didnt get any of that Shakespear crap LMFAO.
A great story soo farr
Ahahahaa I REALLY love the way your girl talks. XD
"BOLLOCKS!" && "If that's your way of trying to get into my knickers," Made me LOL XDD
Although I have to admit.. I didnt get any of that Shakespear crap LMFAO.
A great story soo farr
9/25/2009 c1 5Mrs Prince Charming
Gah! Like I said. I utterly adore your story.
Keep it up baby x3
I truly love the girl and her totally unique personality. Really, really looking forward to future updates.
Luffles, Gabby
5Mrs Prince CharmingGah! Like I said. I utterly adore your story.
Keep it up baby x3
I truly love the girl and her totally unique personality. Really, really looking forward to future updates.
Luffles, Gabby