for What Hurts The Most8/1 c6 Annoyed
Your story sucks. Terribly written. Go k!ll yourself already
Your story sucks. Terribly written. Go k!ll yourself already
6/23/2013 c25 Guest
I know you wrote this story a few years ago, but I just wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed reading it! I don't even remember what I was searching when I came across it, but I'm glad I did! The storyline is very intriguing.. I would tell myself one more chapter,,, and then end up reading five more because I wanted to know what was going to happen next! The only thing I would suggest would be more detail and imagery throughout.. that would really make the story! I will definitely be reading the sequel. Overall, AMAZING. So glad I randomly read this :)
I know you wrote this story a few years ago, but I just wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed reading it! I don't even remember what I was searching when I came across it, but I'm glad I did! The storyline is very intriguing.. I would tell myself one more chapter,,, and then end up reading five more because I wanted to know what was going to happen next! The only thing I would suggest would be more detail and imagery throughout.. that would really make the story! I will definitely be reading the sequel. Overall, AMAZING. So glad I randomly read this :)
7/13/2010 c25 
2DaughterOfPoseiden47
Loved it... Thers only one problem and I kinda am mad about this no offence... But what about Seth? He just got dumped and left in the cold... He should end up in her life... Maybe in the same position Derek was? I don't know but he just seems like he should be with her. It's just the right thing I think. Sorry I hope you're not taking this the wrong way... I just kinda thought Seth was a good guy then he got dumped in the cold... He should get to be like Trace and be a best friend. Do you see what I'm getting at here? I just kinda wish Seth could have been mentioned or something...? Sorry bout all that I was just saying my opinion.. I hope you really consisder my thoughts... But I would really love you're thoughts on my story. I love hearing what other people think. And I would be honored if you would read me story and give your thoughts on it. It's called "Wanted". I love hearing what other people think. :) Thanks and I loved the story. You're an awesome writer! Keep it up! Sequal? Please? :)
2DaughterOfPoseiden47Loved it... Thers only one problem and I kinda am mad about this no offence... But what about Seth? He just got dumped and left in the cold... He should end up in her life... Maybe in the same position Derek was? I don't know but he just seems like he should be with her. It's just the right thing I think. Sorry I hope you're not taking this the wrong way... I just kinda thought Seth was a good guy then he got dumped in the cold... He should get to be like Trace and be a best friend. Do you see what I'm getting at here? I just kinda wish Seth could have been mentioned or something...? Sorry bout all that I was just saying my opinion.. I hope you really consisder my thoughts... But I would really love you're thoughts on my story. I love hearing what other people think. And I would be honored if you would read me story and give your thoughts on it. It's called "Wanted". I love hearing what other people think. :) Thanks and I loved the story. You're an awesome writer! Keep it up! Sequal? Please? :)
7/13/2010 c1 DaughterOfPoseiden47
I forgot to sign in lol but I will in a second but I havnt got a chance to read all but I will read all :)
I forgot to sign in lol but I will in a second but I havnt got a chance to read all but I will read all :)
4/22/2010 c17 2frozenworld
uhm... hey just wondering was it really Seth or Derek who said this line "Jo-"? hehe... sorry about bugging you love your stories by the way. the one on the 16th line from jojo's POV? thanks
2frozenworlduhm... hey just wondering was it really Seth or Derek who said this line "Jo-"? hehe... sorry about bugging you love your stories by the way. the one on the 16th line from jojo's POV? thanks
4/17/2010 c25 7Scarlet Dawn
Oh. My. God. This was an awesome story. I was completely in love with the idea of Jojo to be in love with Seth but no... it turns out that she falls in love with Derek. Oh boy... such a compelling twist ;D
Overall, a purely AWESOME and INCREDIBLE job!
~ Love Fia
7Scarlet DawnOh. My. God. This was an awesome story. I was completely in love with the idea of Jojo to be in love with Seth but no... it turns out that she falls in love with Derek. Oh boy... such a compelling twist ;D
Overall, a purely AWESOME and INCREDIBLE job!
~ Love Fia
4/11/2010 c25 1AlexsandraGabriel
OhMyGosh! Poor Seth D: D: D: But He Should Atleast End Up With Molly! & Trace Should Get Someone! :D But It Was A Great Story. SEQUEL PLEASE.
1AlexsandraGabrielOhMyGosh! Poor Seth D: D: D: But He Should Atleast End Up With Molly! & Trace Should Get Someone! :D But It Was A Great Story. SEQUEL PLEASE.
2/11/2010 c25 fallenxalive
omg omg omg omg
you HAVE to do a sequel
you know hwen you first did it in dereks pov in the later chapters,i though that maybe you made a mistake or something but then it turned out derek was ALIVE!
i heart this story
omg omg omg omg
you HAVE to do a sequel
you know hwen you first did it in dereks pov in the later chapters,i though that maybe you made a mistake or something but then it turned out derek was ALIVE!
i heart this story
2/11/2010 c25 1JustWords
This is an awesome story... but i just thought that maybe some things could be a bit more dramatic, or in some cases, less so. When Derek is at her door after being dead for the past three months, it just seemed to me that after crying over him for the past three months (?) that her reaction would be a bit more dramatic... opening the door, and just saying "your alive?" is sorta like a downplay to the fact that he had faked his death.
I hope you don't take this too harshly, i just wanted to point out something that i thought was a bit off, as one writer to another :)
You have an awesome story here, and a great beginning with the sequel :D great writing!
cheers :)
1JustWordsThis is an awesome story... but i just thought that maybe some things could be a bit more dramatic, or in some cases, less so. When Derek is at her door after being dead for the past three months, it just seemed to me that after crying over him for the past three months (?) that her reaction would be a bit more dramatic... opening the door, and just saying "your alive?" is sorta like a downplay to the fact that he had faked his death.
I hope you don't take this too harshly, i just wanted to point out something that i thought was a bit off, as one writer to another :)
You have an awesome story here, and a great beginning with the sequel :D great writing!
cheers :)
2/8/2010 c25 Person 202
Love this story.
Great job .
I WOULD ABSOLUTELY LOVE A SEQUEL.
Love this story.
Great job .
I WOULD ABSOLUTELY LOVE A SEQUEL.
2/8/2010 c25 8A Moment In The Rain
SEQUEL, SEQUEL, SEQUEL! I cant believe its over! Great ending! This was an amazing story! Let me know if you do a sequel!
8A Moment In The RainSEQUEL, SEQUEL, SEQUEL! I cant believe its over! Great ending! This was an amazing story! Let me know if you do a sequel!