for The Unexpected Benefits of Bowling7/15/2010 c1 
10CassandraStacy
I like this story a lot. It was really cute. Even though there wasn't much dialogue in it, you still managed to capture and keep my attention. I loved how she progressively saw more and more of him until she finally saw the whole of him! The ending was also perfect; you could have dragged it on by showing their game and having some cheesy sap in the process. But instead, you left it open to our interpretation. And bowling . . . def. seems like a great stress reliever!
Cassandra
10CassandraStacyI like this story a lot. It was really cute. Even though there wasn't much dialogue in it, you still managed to capture and keep my attention. I loved how she progressively saw more and more of him until she finally saw the whole of him! The ending was also perfect; you could have dragged it on by showing their game and having some cheesy sap in the process. But instead, you left it open to our interpretation. And bowling . . . def. seems like a great stress reliever!
Cassandra
7/15/2010 c1 sandcastlesinthesand
OHMYGOSH.
That was so incredibly sweet that I can't put it into words how sweet it was. It was also really funny.
I love the main character.
She's awesome.
All in all, GREAT one-shot!
Love it!
OHMYGOSH.
That was so incredibly sweet that I can't put it into words how sweet it was. It was also really funny.
I love the main character.
She's awesome.
All in all, GREAT one-shot!
Love it!
7/14/2010 c1 26WhenItRains
That was cute! And I like how there wasn't really any talking until the end. I also like that she didn't get to her goal because it made it more real and somehow more fun. I really liked this, and I'm surprised that your descriptions could keep my attention. With stuff like this, I usually skip over the long, boring looking paragraphs, but this time I didn't.
Great job. This is going in my favorites. :)
26WhenItRainsThat was cute! And I like how there wasn't really any talking until the end. I also like that she didn't get to her goal because it made it more real and somehow more fun. I really liked this, and I'm surprised that your descriptions could keep my attention. With stuff like this, I usually skip over the long, boring looking paragraphs, but this time I didn't.
Great job. This is going in my favorites. :)
7/13/2010 c1 2electrolysis
"I shake my head and put in my initial. That's enough. Nobody needs to know who I am. I am the angry woman on lane one. I backspace my initial and instead put in A.W.O. Angry woman on one. That's me, officially. I am woman, hear me roar."
I absolutely love your writing style. Seriously. The narration was hilarious and you managed to keep her voice in character really well. I also love how we get to learn about the other characters through the little hints that she gives us throughout the story. Not to mention that nameless characters are a favourite of mine :P
Overall, awesome story. Three thumbs up :D
2electrolysis"I shake my head and put in my initial. That's enough. Nobody needs to know who I am. I am the angry woman on lane one. I backspace my initial and instead put in A.W.O. Angry woman on one. That's me, officially. I am woman, hear me roar."
I absolutely love your writing style. Seriously. The narration was hilarious and you managed to keep her voice in character really well. I also love how we get to learn about the other characters through the little hints that she gives us throughout the story. Not to mention that nameless characters are a favourite of mine :P
Overall, awesome story. Three thumbs up :D
4/12/2010 c1 57Jacqueline.E
Lmao, I laughed out loud. Gosh, never have I done that. See you, making me laugh. It was another great piece, brought up another smile for me. Great work! Lovely writing! Love it x
57Jacqueline.ELmao, I laughed out loud. Gosh, never have I done that. See you, making me laugh. It was another great piece, brought up another smile for me. Great work! Lovely writing! Love it x
4/8/2010 c1 Icyfire4w5
Hmm, I’ve been wondering why my classmates are so obsessed with bowling, and now I realize that when you strike all those pins down, you’re releasing all your anger. No wonder my bowling-loving classmates all seem so happy and peaceful. By the way, I love this story. Its plot is believable, plus the pin boy is so cute that I'm tempted to date him.
Hmm, I’ve been wondering why my classmates are so obsessed with bowling, and now I realize that when you strike all those pins down, you’re releasing all your anger. No wonder my bowling-loving classmates all seem so happy and peaceful. By the way, I love this story. Its plot is believable, plus the pin boy is so cute that I'm tempted to date him.
3/12/2010 c1 MelodyFlame
i loved it cute storyline maybe a sequel ? please ;)
i loved it cute storyline maybe a sequel ? please ;)
2/13/2010 c1 25Kyllex
This was great! I just loved it. I love the fact that it's written frame by frame. I also love how the characters don't have names. I love...agh. I love everything about it! It was awesome, and it made me grin like a maniac. (: Very well done! I love your writing style.
25KyllexThis was great! I just loved it. I love the fact that it's written frame by frame. I also love how the characters don't have names. I love...agh. I love everything about it! It was awesome, and it made me grin like a maniac. (: Very well done! I love your writing style.
2/13/2010 c1 14its.Nothing.Special
gahh way too cute! love how this guy was just hands at first and now he's..you know, completely present and cuter than ever. well-written and creative as always!
;)becky
14its.Nothing.Specialgahh way too cute! love how this guy was just hands at first and now he's..you know, completely present and cuter than ever. well-written and creative as always!
;)becky
1/9/2010 c1 Artume
Oh, it was totally worth posting! I really enjoyed this ONE-SHOT! It's always nice to read a well-written piece of fiction, especially if it has an intriguing plot. Well done!
Oh, it was totally worth posting! I really enjoyed this ONE-SHOT! It's always nice to read a well-written piece of fiction, especially if it has an intriguing plot. Well done!
11/21/2009 c1 1barelyamiable
Oh, I adored this. The frames provided a good structure. And I felt like I could relate to this since I bowl better when I'm angry, too! :)
1barelyamiableOh, I adored this. The frames provided a good structure. And I felt like I could relate to this since I bowl better when I'm angry, too! :)
10/8/2009 c1 natmarie
I thought this was a cute little piece. Nice emotion and the frames of bowling helps move the reader through it. I love bowling and have had a few run ins with cuties there so I'm glad someone combined both into one piece. :) Terrific.
I thought this was a cute little piece. Nice emotion and the frames of bowling helps move the reader through it. I love bowling and have had a few run ins with cuties there so I'm glad someone combined both into one piece. :) Terrific.
9/29/2009 c1 Randi
awsome
awsome