for Wedding Surprise9/13/2016 c1 haylE15
Yeah in your teeth you all close minded people! What a beautiful ending! The whole story was really cool and it amaze me that I wasn't bothered by the age gap at all even with the one being the mother of the sister's husband x)
The only thing I disliked is Sheryl's way of dealing with things. My opinion on Berk changed along the story in a good way but I think I disliked Sheryl from the beginning until the end.
Maybe even more since it reminds me of my sister and I. But I'm glad she is her complete opposite!
Thanks for sharing this with us!
Yeah in your teeth you all close minded people! What a beautiful ending! The whole story was really cool and it amaze me that I wasn't bothered by the age gap at all even with the one being the mother of the sister's husband x)
The only thing I disliked is Sheryl's way of dealing with things. My opinion on Berk changed along the story in a good way but I think I disliked Sheryl from the beginning until the end.
Maybe even more since it reminds me of my sister and I. But I'm glad she is her complete opposite!
Thanks for sharing this with us!
4/2/2014 c1 Guest
It was incredible...great great great great...im speechless...
tears are still in my eyes...somewhere was so painfull and the end was definitely great...i loved it
It was incredible...great great great great...im speechless...
tears are still in my eyes...somewhere was so painfull and the end was definitely great...i loved it
1/20/2011 c1 DarkHeartxMeeko
I usually don't read femslash, but this story seemed to stick out a lot, and I'm glad to have read this story. This was truly a beautifully inspirational story that has a very good moral. I come from a strict family also, and I question if they would accept my sexual preference as well. This story gives courage and hope for others.
I usually don't read femslash, but this story seemed to stick out a lot, and I'm glad to have read this story. This was truly a beautifully inspirational story that has a very good moral. I come from a strict family also, and I question if they would accept my sexual preference as well. This story gives courage and hope for others.
10/23/2010 c1 Adrian St Claire
Amazing! As usual you never let me down. Geez, what a perfect one shot. Makes me wanna move to Texas.
Ha I'll send you more via email.
Amazing! As usual you never let me down. Geez, what a perfect one shot. Makes me wanna move to Texas.
Ha I'll send you more via email.
5/19/2010 c1 Freudian Slips Cause Problems
Haha this was a good story. I enjoyed it. Thanks for writing it.
Haha this was a good story. I enjoyed it. Thanks for writing it.
3/14/2010 c1 your fan
I don't leave reviews. They're normally just a bunch of baseless praise that I feel is undeserving and only further deludes people into thinking they're better than they really are. Any reviews that leave criticism are normally ignored as well, so I just don't bother. This piece you wrote though, I find quite deserving.
Now I won't tell you it's perfect, because I didn't feel it was, though there weren't a great many things I found lacking. One was when Chris and Nicole met in the bathroom. Even if they were the only people on each others minds since their shared night 4 years prior, I don't think they would quite be all over each other like that upon meeting again. My only other complaint is Sheryl.
Sheryl was an awesome character with the way you wrote her. At first she's the supportive little sister until she actually sees her sister in the midst of acting upon her lesbian desires. Like she didn't believe it at first which made it easy to be accepting, but once she sees it, out comes the true feelings towards what her sister is. All of this made for a really great, believable character. The end though, didn't quite fit her. I'm happy that Chris was accepted by her sister, but the change back to the supportive little sister seemed to abrupt. She seemed too accepting for how you were portraying just a few paragraphs before.
Now Berk was another great character you wrote. Honestly I have no problems with him. When I first meet him, he seems like a downright snobby asshole. As I read further though he seemed more like he was lacking in confidence and was just seeking to please those around him. As the story progressed further he grew a back bone and stuck up for his mothers happiness which was awesome. I love Berk, he's my favorite character you wrote even though you didn't write a whole lot of him.
Beyond you characters the story you wrote was just written very well. I don't remember seeing any grammatical or spelling errors, though I could have been just absorbed in the story and missed them because you paced the story very well. There weren't any parts where I was thinking that things needed to move faster or slow down. Anyways I do love your story and will probably checking out more from you.
I don't leave reviews. They're normally just a bunch of baseless praise that I feel is undeserving and only further deludes people into thinking they're better than they really are. Any reviews that leave criticism are normally ignored as well, so I just don't bother. This piece you wrote though, I find quite deserving.
Now I won't tell you it's perfect, because I didn't feel it was, though there weren't a great many things I found lacking. One was when Chris and Nicole met in the bathroom. Even if they were the only people on each others minds since their shared night 4 years prior, I don't think they would quite be all over each other like that upon meeting again. My only other complaint is Sheryl.
Sheryl was an awesome character with the way you wrote her. At first she's the supportive little sister until she actually sees her sister in the midst of acting upon her lesbian desires. Like she didn't believe it at first which made it easy to be accepting, but once she sees it, out comes the true feelings towards what her sister is. All of this made for a really great, believable character. The end though, didn't quite fit her. I'm happy that Chris was accepted by her sister, but the change back to the supportive little sister seemed to abrupt. She seemed too accepting for how you were portraying just a few paragraphs before.
Now Berk was another great character you wrote. Honestly I have no problems with him. When I first meet him, he seems like a downright snobby asshole. As I read further though he seemed more like he was lacking in confidence and was just seeking to please those around him. As the story progressed further he grew a back bone and stuck up for his mothers happiness which was awesome. I love Berk, he's my favorite character you wrote even though you didn't write a whole lot of him.
Beyond you characters the story you wrote was just written very well. I don't remember seeing any grammatical or spelling errors, though I could have been just absorbed in the story and missed them because you paced the story very well. There weren't any parts where I was thinking that things needed to move faster or slow down. Anyways I do love your story and will probably checking out more from you.
3/3/2010 c1 Maggie
This was one of the first pieces I ever read on fictionpress and though I've gotten to know and love other pieces more, this really was what pulled me in, in the beginning. I figured if there was something this well-written here then there must be others. And I certainly found others in Sonnets and Secrets. This just makes me more excited to continue reading everything you've written because you really are fantastic. :)
Maggie ♥ (
This was one of the first pieces I ever read on fictionpress and though I've gotten to know and love other pieces more, this really was what pulled me in, in the beginning. I figured if there was something this well-written here then there must be others. And I certainly found others in Sonnets and Secrets. This just makes me more excited to continue reading everything you've written because you really are fantastic. :)
Maggie ♥ (
1/4/2010 c1 
2With a Side of Chocolate
You captured the emotions and real life drama beautifully. Good job!
2With a Side of ChocolateYou captured the emotions and real life drama beautifully. Good job!