for The Insaine Life of Me, Alyssa Powell10/2/2009 c1 flies.like.decay
First tip. The title should say "insane" and not "insaine".
I had all my books, my schedule, and a map. Yup, life at Carrington High School was defiantly going to be different.
-"Defiantly" should be "definitely".
...but I had no idea what my ubber-conservaive mother would say about it.
-Uber conservative?
she wined.
-Wine is a drink. You'll want to add an "h".
“Ok well then you better put the car in drive and move the car or we’ll be even later!”
-Car doesn't need to be said twice.
Sorry, I know I hate reading through a story only to discover that the reviewers (who all say "THIS IS PERFECTLY WRITTEN") haven't informed you of any mistakes (although I'm guilty of it xD)
For the mom being an artist, she's pretty uptight. Anyway, you have a good beginning. Hope to see more.
First tip. The title should say "insane" and not "insaine".
I had all my books, my schedule, and a map. Yup, life at Carrington High School was defiantly going to be different.
-"Defiantly" should be "definitely".
...but I had no idea what my ubber-conservaive mother would say about it.
-Uber conservative?
she wined.
-Wine is a drink. You'll want to add an "h".
“Ok well then you better put the car in drive and move the car or we’ll be even later!”
-Car doesn't need to be said twice.
Sorry, I know I hate reading through a story only to discover that the reviewers (who all say "THIS IS PERFECTLY WRITTEN") haven't informed you of any mistakes (although I'm guilty of it xD)
For the mom being an artist, she's pretty uptight. Anyway, you have a good beginning. Hope to see more.