for Fourteen Years After10/3/2009 c1 
11P. S. Giovanni
This was fairly good for a first poem. My only complaint is that the whole poem was powerful, but the last few lines were not. The last few lines should be the best lines out of poem, something that sticks with you. I didn't feel that. If you added a few emotive lines onto the end poem, the ending would be as powerful as the rest of the poem. Good job, and keep writing!
11P. S. GiovanniThis was fairly good for a first poem. My only complaint is that the whole poem was powerful, but the last few lines were not. The last few lines should be the best lines out of poem, something that sticks with you. I didn't feel that. If you added a few emotive lines onto the end poem, the ending would be as powerful as the rest of the poem. Good job, and keep writing!