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10/5/2009 c1 45deefective
Hm, I'm not one for limericks really because I always find they're too sing-songy but not in the good way. As for this, I liked the title but I don't think the actual content matched. It seemed really off actually, I was expecting something different. Though, I did like the imagery in the line; "Our cold necks swept with bristled hair". It's really detailed and sort of makes the reader zoom in in their heads to get the picture correct. That was nice. I didn't like the ending though because, I'm not sure what it is, but it seemed off rhythm with the rest of the piece. Maybe it's just me but it didn't seem to fit.
10/4/2009 c1 17sunday night sky
aww thats so cute! and funny. i like the first two lines the best... i hope you win :)

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