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7/9/2010 c1 26Mirabella
Wow! Another brilliant peice. You are good at writing to prompts!
10/18/2009 c1 17Eponine254
I absolutely loved this! The imagery in this is amazing. It's really vivid and powerful. You captured a sense of anarchic freedom beautifully. Very well done!
10/10/2009 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
I really liked how you added dialogue to this piece, the “baby ain‘t it beautiful?” and so on. It really grounded the piece and made me feel more of a connection to the narrator and the couple as a whole. I say couple because your use of ‘baby’ made me think of people who are in love.

I also liked how surrealistic and abstract the nature of the piece was. It was clear that some sort of destruction was going on, but you never really allude it what it might be, which I think in this case strengthens the overall message. And again, with what I said before, the dialogue really helps to ground it in this sense, because without it the themes might have been too out there for the reader to really grasp. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.

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