for What's The Point?3/6/2011 c1 Harry's Scar
It was a good poem, but I think you need to add an overcomement at the end. Overcome all the bad and say something good about life, like, what's really the point of living? The point of living, is that, even if we don't know it yet, there's something we were put on Earth to do. We may have already done it, or maybe not. We never know. But always live as long as you can. It's God's greatest gift.
Overall, you did a great job. Nicely written. Just add a verse of happiness at the end, be thoughtful. Make the reader realize that this one thing in life can mask all the bad things.
It was a good poem, but I think you need to add an overcomement at the end. Overcome all the bad and say something good about life, like, what's really the point of living? The point of living, is that, even if we don't know it yet, there's something we were put on Earth to do. We may have already done it, or maybe not. We never know. But always live as long as you can. It's God's greatest gift.
Overall, you did a great job. Nicely written. Just add a verse of happiness at the end, be thoughtful. Make the reader realize that this one thing in life can mask all the bad things.
2/11/2011 c1 
1StoryMonster
Very deep, intense and emotional.
That's all I can say, I mean, everything was just about there and I loved it!
Great job.
1StoryMonsterVery deep, intense and emotional.
That's all I can say, I mean, everything was just about there and I loved it!
Great job.
8/16/2010 c1 Prainey Boy
Perfect song storyline, itd be perfect, except, all you need to do now, is add a verse of happiness. That life is a challenge that you HAVE to overcome. Life is a song and you gotta figure out the melody. etc. get me, we'll talk tomorrow, BUT either way, it is god :) Nice work Jagga, I really like this one, think Ive already told you that
Perfect song storyline, itd be perfect, except, all you need to do now, is add a verse of happiness. That life is a challenge that you HAVE to overcome. Life is a song and you gotta figure out the melody. etc. get me, we'll talk tomorrow, BUT either way, it is god :) Nice work Jagga, I really like this one, think Ive already told you that
5/14/2010 c1 12lianoid
I really like the lines: “What's the point of reading. When gossip will tell its' tale?” Although I’m wondering if “its” really needs an apostrophe at the end. I really liked a lot of these questions, and the overall sense of helplessness. I’m not a huge fan of the last four lines though. I just feel that they suddenly diverted from the pace. Overall though, this was really good.
12lianoidI really like the lines: “What's the point of reading. When gossip will tell its' tale?” Although I’m wondering if “its” really needs an apostrophe at the end. I really liked a lot of these questions, and the overall sense of helplessness. I’m not a huge fan of the last four lines though. I just feel that they suddenly diverted from the pace. Overall though, this was really good.
4/29/2010 c1 287Archia
This poem had no much truths in it so that it's really good. I like the lines 'What's the point of studying When mostly we will fail?' because it's reallyt true for me. A beautiful and thoughtful poem.
287ArchiaThis poem had no much truths in it so that it's really good. I like the lines 'What's the point of studying When mostly we will fail?' because it's reallyt true for me. A beautiful and thoughtful poem.
4/15/2010 c1 11Mindyy Lovely
Wow. This was lovely.
It was very heartfelt and true, I love the way that all the emotions just build up into an ending that really makes you think about what the authors really trying to say. There is so much pain in this poem that it's hard not to feel something strong while reading it.
Wonderful!=D
11Mindyy LovelyWow. This was lovely.
It was very heartfelt and true, I love the way that all the emotions just build up into an ending that really makes you think about what the authors really trying to say. There is so much pain in this poem that it's hard not to feel something strong while reading it.
Wonderful!=D
1/29/2010 c1 9writingpistachio
It was a very make-you-think piece. Many truths in here, really.
"What’s the point of reading
When gossip will tell its’ tale?" That was a great line; it's true! True in many ways. Very good. The rhythm was there, the rhyming was great.
Excellent work!
All the best,
Victoria.
9writingpistachioIt was a very make-you-think piece. Many truths in here, really.
"What’s the point of reading
When gossip will tell its’ tale?" That was a great line; it's true! True in many ways. Very good. The rhythm was there, the rhyming was great.
Excellent work!
All the best,
Victoria.
12/16/2009 c1 4HighOnBrokenWings
Oh.
Bit of a glass half empty poem, huh?
I liked it. Truthful. Straight to the... Well, point, I guess.
But it made me think.
I do love those depressing poems :D
As nuts as that may sound.
Great stuff :D
4HighOnBrokenWingsOh.
Bit of a glass half empty poem, huh?
I liked it. Truthful. Straight to the... Well, point, I guess.
But it made me think.
I do love those depressing poems :D
As nuts as that may sound.
Great stuff :D
11/18/2009 c1 20Raingypsy
Wow. I adore this. It's very well written and I dunno, it just has a certain something about it.
Well Done.
20RaingypsyWow. I adore this. It's very well written and I dunno, it just has a certain something about it.
Well Done.
10/10/2009 c1 17Midnight Shiver
ooh, i love this
theres nothing like sincerely hurt-filled poetry to help you feel better.
sharing pain with someone is always a treat, in that you don't feel alone.
thank you for your poem, i really do appreciate it.
17Midnight Shiverooh, i love this
theres nothing like sincerely hurt-filled poetry to help you feel better.
sharing pain with someone is always a treat, in that you don't feel alone.
thank you for your poem, i really do appreciate it.