for A Strange Encounter7/30/2010 c1 
83Vintage Writer
I AM LOVING THIS! i know you probably are not going to continue this and u are also writing AONSTC but if you have time... you know.. you could write this one too? GAH i feel like a terrible person making you do things and stuff, but this is really good! and if you arent going to continue it can you just tell me what you had in mind for he story like what is going to happen? XD
83Vintage WriterI AM LOVING THIS! i know you probably are not going to continue this and u are also writing AONSTC but if you have time... you know.. you could write this one too? GAH i feel like a terrible person making you do things and stuff, but this is really good! and if you arent going to continue it can you just tell me what you had in mind for he story like what is going to happen? XD
6/19/2010 c4 23AvidWriter-92
ooh! This is great!
I liked how you gave the characters more depth, especially Anna. She seems like a nice "person." :P
Now the story is making much more sense. :D So, Alexis isn't entirely human... Very interesting. :D
I think that her reactions to the council saying that they were vampires was pretty funny, actually.
However, I do think that she sounded a bit childish, and her sentences were dragging on... So, I would change that up a bit. :) Otherwise, nothing else!
~Avid. GF. :)
23AvidWriter-92ooh! This is great!
I liked how you gave the characters more depth, especially Anna. She seems like a nice "person." :P
Now the story is making much more sense. :D So, Alexis isn't entirely human... Very interesting. :D
I think that her reactions to the council saying that they were vampires was pretty funny, actually.
However, I do think that she sounded a bit childish, and her sentences were dragging on... So, I would change that up a bit. :) Otherwise, nothing else!
~Avid. GF. :)
6/19/2010 c3 AvidWriter-92
I liked this chapter also. I'm getting very curious as to what and where the girl is at... (I forget her name. :P) I'm guessing that it's some sort of hide-away. (?)
I liked how you threw in the four women, their characters are pretty cool, actually. :P
I do like her conversation with Salvatore; he seems like such a badass guy. Lol.
I wonder what he means by "she's the one..."
Hmm...
Great work. :)
I only suggest that you make your sentences not so long. They tend to run-on in some places, and that distracts the reader from reading. :P
~Avid. GF. (2/2. :D)
I liked this chapter also. I'm getting very curious as to what and where the girl is at... (I forget her name. :P) I'm guessing that it's some sort of hide-away. (?)
I liked how you threw in the four women, their characters are pretty cool, actually. :P
I do like her conversation with Salvatore; he seems like such a badass guy. Lol.
I wonder what he means by "she's the one..."
Hmm...
Great work. :)
I only suggest that you make your sentences not so long. They tend to run-on in some places, and that distracts the reader from reading. :P
~Avid. GF. (2/2. :D)
6/19/2010 c2 AvidWriter-92
Hmm. :P This is a really neat chapter. :)
I really did like the descriptions of when she wakes up, and just in general. They were really well written. :)
The only thing is I think you should change around the descriptions of the two guys... They just are a little too cliche for my tastes. :P
Although, they are very interesting, whatever creature they are. (My bet is a werewolf. :P)
I also like how they can (somehow) control her emotions. That's very neat.
Good job! :) I didn't see any grammatical errors. :P :D
~Avid. (GF. Returning reviews... 1/2)
Hmm. :P This is a really neat chapter. :)
I really did like the descriptions of when she wakes up, and just in general. They were really well written. :)
The only thing is I think you should change around the descriptions of the two guys... They just are a little too cliche for my tastes. :P
Although, they are very interesting, whatever creature they are. (My bet is a werewolf. :P)
I also like how they can (somehow) control her emotions. That's very neat.
Good job! :) I didn't see any grammatical errors. :P :D
~Avid. (GF. Returning reviews... 1/2)
5/27/2010 c1 23AvidWriter-92
Hey, this first chapter is pretty interesting! :)
I liked the ending the best because it was pretty mysterious, and I thought it was cool how she had these "powers..."
Some of the sentences don't flow very well with the other ones, I've noticed. :P
An example would be:
"After we reached our destination, a really nice clearing, with tufts of grass slightly covered by specks of snow, evidence of the coming winter, which was approaching."
I think that this sentence should be divided up into shorter sentences, and not have as many interrupters. It doesn't sound very natural this way...
I would rewrite it something like: We finally reached our destination. It was a nice clearing, and there was a light dusting of snow covering the tufts of grass-Winter would soon be on it's way."
Or something along those lines.
:)
~Avid. :)
Roadhouse.
23AvidWriter-92Hey, this first chapter is pretty interesting! :)
I liked the ending the best because it was pretty mysterious, and I thought it was cool how she had these "powers..."
Some of the sentences don't flow very well with the other ones, I've noticed. :P
An example would be:
"After we reached our destination, a really nice clearing, with tufts of grass slightly covered by specks of snow, evidence of the coming winter, which was approaching."
I think that this sentence should be divided up into shorter sentences, and not have as many interrupters. It doesn't sound very natural this way...
I would rewrite it something like: We finally reached our destination. It was a nice clearing, and there was a light dusting of snow covering the tufts of grass-Winter would soon be on it's way."
Or something along those lines.
:)
~Avid. :)
Roadhouse.
5/27/2010 c3 300.03 The Rumor
I love how you introduce characters without going nuts and giving away everything about them. Also 'His anger, frustration and annoyance were practically slapping me in waves and I had to wince. His emotions wrapped around me and felt like they were squeezing my soul right out of me.'
It conveys the emotion really well and vividly. Really well done.
300.03 The RumorI love how you introduce characters without going nuts and giving away everything about them. Also 'His anger, frustration and annoyance were practically slapping me in waves and I had to wince. His emotions wrapped around me and felt like they were squeezing my soul right out of me.'
It conveys the emotion really well and vividly. Really well done.
5/26/2010 c4 Alice Novak
omg.. so cliche! But well written, really well written.
The plot really sunk in and I could visualize the entire scene.
In fact, I think this is better than AONSTC.
But then again, it may just be me,
since I'm a supernatural rocker fan.
But, like your other story,
you need to work on your pacing, dialogue and narration.
It's written very simply,
But I just don't think its' enough to give the atmosphere.
Improvising and just writing blah-ish stuff should do the trick!
Deli .x
omg.. so cliche! But well written, really well written.
The plot really sunk in and I could visualize the entire scene.
In fact, I think this is better than AONSTC.
But then again, it may just be me,
since I'm a supernatural rocker fan.
But, like your other story,
you need to work on your pacing, dialogue and narration.
It's written very simply,
But I just don't think its' enough to give the atmosphere.
Improvising and just writing blah-ish stuff should do the trick!
Deli .x
5/25/2010 c1 8Kobra Kid
This was very interesting overall! I just have one note...
Why did she go into the forest? You say that it was an idiotic thing to do, but why? Was she trying to escape her life? Or was she just wondering with her thoughts? A little explanation would make that seem very realistic. Besides that, I really enjoyed this! Good job!
-B. Cross from the RH
P.S. Can you please payback via Rise From The Ashes? And please not on the prologue. I have like...5712 reviews on that. :3. Thanks!
8Kobra KidThis was very interesting overall! I just have one note...
Why did she go into the forest? You say that it was an idiotic thing to do, but why? Was she trying to escape her life? Or was she just wondering with her thoughts? A little explanation would make that seem very realistic. Besides that, I really enjoyed this! Good job!
-B. Cross from the RH
P.S. Can you please payback via Rise From The Ashes? And please not on the prologue. I have like...5712 reviews on that. :3. Thanks!
5/16/2010 c4 chocolate101
Awsome story. I like the plot so far and the characters. Keep up the good work and before you know it many people will leave a review. Update soon
Mirji
Awsome story. I like the plot so far and the characters. Keep up the good work and before you know it many people will leave a review. Update soon
Mirji
5/13/2010 c4 ButterflyD
I just read this - I think the story has a lot of potential so far. I cannot really say much about the plot or characters because it's clear that you are just getting started. But I am definitely interested in learning more about Alexis and her history. It's intrigued me, that's for sure.
The only suggestion I have so far is that you should proofread for misspellings, run-on sentences, missing commas, etc. I did notice some. But your story was still well-written nonetheless.
I have subscribed to this story. I look forward to your next updates. :)
I just read this - I think the story has a lot of potential so far. I cannot really say much about the plot or characters because it's clear that you are just getting started. But I am definitely interested in learning more about Alexis and her history. It's intrigued me, that's for sure.
The only suggestion I have so far is that you should proofread for misspellings, run-on sentences, missing commas, etc. I did notice some. But your story was still well-written nonetheless.
I have subscribed to this story. I look forward to your next updates. :)
2/27/2010 c3 daydrmr
so far this is a decent story, hope you're going to continue soon-don't leave us hangin'
so far this is a decent story, hope you're going to continue soon-don't leave us hangin'
12/31/2009 c3 rblgrl20
Sorry it's taken me so long to read and review, my computer has been down for a while.
I like how she hasn't figured out exactly what's going on yet; how she seems oblivious to what's really going on in the situation.
I can't wait for the next chapter; I want her to finally get some answers.
Keep up the good work, it's an excellent story.
Sorry it's taken me so long to read and review, my computer has been down for a while.
I like how she hasn't figured out exactly what's going on yet; how she seems oblivious to what's really going on in the situation.
I can't wait for the next chapter; I want her to finally get some answers.
Keep up the good work, it's an excellent story.
11/6/2009 c1 rblgrl20
I love this story! It's very well written as well as intriguing.
Please keep writing it :)
I love this story! It's very well written as well as intriguing.
Please keep writing it :)