for Us: A Reflection10/12/2009 c1 
31a smile from a veil
This is heartbreaking, but very beautiful. I have been through the same thing. It's rough, but you'll find someone worthy of your love. Great job. You should read my piece "I shine less without you". It deals with the same subject.
31a smile from a veilThis is heartbreaking, but very beautiful. I have been through the same thing. It's rough, but you'll find someone worthy of your love. Great job. You should read my piece "I shine less without you". It deals with the same subject.
10/11/2009 c1 26Jhaynee
I definitely see the underlying emotion in this piece, although the syllables were off, negatively affecting the beat. I feel rhyming definitely restrained your use of vocabulary, that could have definitely made this piece much deeper than it is.
In the end it was a good read.
26JhayneeI definitely see the underlying emotion in this piece, although the syllables were off, negatively affecting the beat. I feel rhyming definitely restrained your use of vocabulary, that could have definitely made this piece much deeper than it is.
In the end it was a good read.