for The Prophecy12/22/2018 c15 Reader
Seemed a bit rushed at the end, but overall a pretty interesting story that could likely inspire a few more tales without much effort. Or so it seems to this gal.
Seemed a bit rushed at the end, but overall a pretty interesting story that could likely inspire a few more tales without much effort. Or so it seems to this gal.
12/20/2014 c5 Reviewer
Surprisingly good, and intricate tale. Could use a bit more editing, but the story was solid, and a great read.
Surprisingly good, and intricate tale. Could use a bit more editing, but the story was solid, and a great read.
6/2/2014 c5 Drifter
Could use a touch more editing, but a very fantastical tale that keeps one riveted. Good job.
Could use a touch more editing, but a very fantastical tale that keeps one riveted. Good job.
6/3/2012 c5 numnuts
Well I'm glad Mira met Tylvan, was finally released, and had a possibly happy possibly not ending. Still find Marion a not-very-convincing good guy. I am sure she was evil.
I lost the plot occasionally, due to my complete disinterest in Marion and jacob. Still, all that said, very good, bit pervy at the beginning, which I think might put people off. I almost was, but I skimmed until the plot began, (and promptly misunderstood that Miranda was the heroine). You have to ease people into the perversion of what are going to be you two main characters. I think the plot needs to be fleshed out a bit more, but I thought this was very well written, and very well-imagined. Kudos to you!
Well I'm glad Mira met Tylvan, was finally released, and had a possibly happy possibly not ending. Still find Marion a not-very-convincing good guy. I am sure she was evil.
I lost the plot occasionally, due to my complete disinterest in Marion and jacob. Still, all that said, very good, bit pervy at the beginning, which I think might put people off. I almost was, but I skimmed until the plot began, (and promptly misunderstood that Miranda was the heroine). You have to ease people into the perversion of what are going to be you two main characters. I think the plot needs to be fleshed out a bit more, but I thought this was very well written, and very well-imagined. Kudos to you!
6/3/2012 c2 numnuts
Gonna be honest, don't give a whit for Marion. Can't stand everyone faffing around. Don't mind Agatha, so far. Everyone else is unbearable. No saving graces at all. Only reading on to see if wimpy Miranda escapes these fucking lunatics - especially that extremely dangerous dosey cow Marion.
Gonna be honest, don't give a whit for Marion. Can't stand everyone faffing around. Don't mind Agatha, so far. Everyone else is unbearable. No saving graces at all. Only reading on to see if wimpy Miranda escapes these fucking lunatics - especially that extremely dangerous dosey cow Marion.