for just like my heart2/16/2010 c1 
23thinking.about.thinking
The second stanza, for me, was the most powerful and the one most filled with emotion. Beautiful.
thinking.about.thinking
23thinking.about.thinkingThe second stanza, for me, was the most powerful and the one most filled with emotion. Beautiful.
thinking.about.thinking
1/1/2010 c1 Isca
"Just like my heart, these words will not keep you dry." This is a very startling and thought-provoking opening line. I like it a lot. :)
"Just like my heart, these words will not keep you dry." This is a very startling and thought-provoking opening line. I like it a lot. :)
11/28/2009 c1 1tonight we bloom
you have a beautiful, simple style with gorgeous description and diction. i love this poem.
i would love opinions from a talented writer like yourself on my work, it would mean a lot to me!
1tonight we bloomyou have a beautiful, simple style with gorgeous description and diction. i love this poem.
i would love opinions from a talented writer like yourself on my work, it would mean a lot to me!
10/17/2009 c1 9GothOnTheInside
Wow, very nice imagery! Loved the opening:
"just like my heart/ these words will not keep you dry"
and the ending:
"we live in this popsicle/ melting sweet bliss" best.
I would love to see more concrete imagery in the second stanza, something that really pulls the reader in like these opening and closing images.
9GothOnTheInsideWow, very nice imagery! Loved the opening:
"just like my heart/ these words will not keep you dry"
and the ending:
"we live in this popsicle/ melting sweet bliss" best.
I would love to see more concrete imagery in the second stanza, something that really pulls the reader in like these opening and closing images.
10/17/2009 c1 45deefective
Ah, I loved the melancholic tone under all of this. It had that sad and mournful feel to it that made me think of the words as being like wind rustling in the leaves. Also, your word choice was great. They meshed well together and nothing seemed off or out of place. I also liked the imagery, especially in the first line. It put an interesting picture in my head. Nicely done.
-Dee, from the Review Marathon.
Check it out sometime. Link's in my profile!
45deefectiveAh, I loved the melancholic tone under all of this. It had that sad and mournful feel to it that made me think of the words as being like wind rustling in the leaves. Also, your word choice was great. They meshed well together and nothing seemed off or out of place. I also liked the imagery, especially in the first line. It put an interesting picture in my head. Nicely done.
-Dee, from the Review Marathon.
Check it out sometime. Link's in my profile!