for Goal!11/26/2009 c11 
3chazza-x
whoever sent you a nasty message is wrong, i love this story and your english is better than some of my friends (and their english) so really that person should get a life and grow up. If they don't like the story don't read it, if not -and if your reading this person-who-sent-the-nasty-message learn some self respect and not be a twat.
Anywayz, i love your story, i hope Ilse gets with Jerome, and i hope Dider and Nina are okay.
Keep Writing
C
3chazza-xwhoever sent you a nasty message is wrong, i love this story and your english is better than some of my friends (and their english) so really that person should get a life and grow up. If they don't like the story don't read it, if not -and if your reading this person-who-sent-the-nasty-message learn some self respect and not be a twat.
Anywayz, i love your story, i hope Ilse gets with Jerome, and i hope Dider and Nina are okay.
Keep Writing
C
11/26/2009 c11 czarina
hi!
first things first, i like your story very much and i hope you will continue with these story despite the criticism you have.
second, practice makes it perfect...so continuing writing in English and soon you write perfectly in english...
looking forward to your next update in English...
take care.. :D
hi!
first things first, i like your story very much and i hope you will continue with these story despite the criticism you have.
second, practice makes it perfect...so continuing writing in English and soon you write perfectly in english...
looking forward to your next update in English...
take care.. :D
11/26/2009 c11 2SilentShadow91
i like ur story and most people can't be ur critics because everyone that is here is just practicing making their writting better... and if u want me to help u with the translating to spanish thing let me know
2SilentShadow91i like ur story and most people can't be ur critics because everyone that is here is just practicing making their writting better... and if u want me to help u with the translating to spanish thing let me know
11/25/2009 c10 Graphomanic
You know I don't think your English is that bad...Or it is my English I should worry about then?(Probably not the case though...English is my mother tongue. Maybe it's my weirdly literate brain this is correcting it unconsciously and I don't really notice?)
But I would like to tell you that I love your story!
Even though I didn't even realize that you were talking about Football(Soccer)! Not North American football.(I'm Canadian.) I finally realized it when you mentioned that British soccer(football) dude who's married to a former Spice Girl...
You know I don't think your English is that bad...Or it is my English I should worry about then?(Probably not the case though...English is my mother tongue. Maybe it's my weirdly literate brain this is correcting it unconsciously and I don't really notice?)
But I would like to tell you that I love your story!
Even though I didn't even realize that you were talking about Football(Soccer)! Not North American football.(I'm Canadian.) I finally realized it when you mentioned that British soccer(football) dude who's married to a former Spice Girl...
11/25/2009 c10 twilight24
haha, omg, Nina's hilarious! I was laughing throughout the whole scene with Nina in it!I cant believe she actually told Jerome...I wonder how he'll take it! And that little remark about how Jerome hoped Isle wasnt his sister was cute. It made me squeal with happiness...I know I'm weird. But it was so cute! And he cared!
oh, and you totally shouldn't stop writing this story! I love it! And your English is not so bad that you can't understand it. It's actually pretty good considering you're not native to it. So yeah, keep writing :)
haha, omg, Nina's hilarious! I was laughing throughout the whole scene with Nina in it!I cant believe she actually told Jerome...I wonder how he'll take it! And that little remark about how Jerome hoped Isle wasnt his sister was cute. It made me squeal with happiness...I know I'm weird. But it was so cute! And he cared!
oh, and you totally shouldn't stop writing this story! I love it! And your English is not so bad that you can't understand it. It's actually pretty good considering you're not native to it. So yeah, keep writing :)
11/25/2009 c10 Need the happy ending
Please continue this story!
I just found it today and I already love it. And I am very impressed with your English. Yes there a few places where you leave out a word or mix them up (IE you say watching when it should be looking at), but you still write better than many of the writers who speak English from the start. All you need is someone to edit and you'll be fine.
Please continue this story!
I just found it today and I already love it. And I am very impressed with your English. Yes there a few places where you leave out a word or mix them up (IE you say watching when it should be looking at), but you still write better than many of the writers who speak English from the start. All you need is someone to edit and you'll be fine.
11/25/2009 c10 E
I think you write just fine. I'm glad you are writing in English because then I can enjoy it! Overall the story is good. I love how Isle interacts with everyone, some friendships, especially the one with Nina, seem slightly rushed but I think under the circumstance it could happen!
You go!
I think you write just fine. I'm glad you are writing in English because then I can enjoy it! Overall the story is good. I love how Isle interacts with everyone, some friendships, especially the one with Nina, seem slightly rushed but I think under the circumstance it could happen!
You go!
11/25/2009 c10 Xiaolu
Don't give up, okay? I'm really admiring you for doing what you do. As you, my native tongue isn't English and when I try to write in English, it comes out as... flat and boring. Your story, though, is nice. Of course, it's not perfect but everyone can improve. You could try to get a beta (they have good ones on fp) !
Honestly, I (and I'm sure others as well) really like your story.
Nice chapter, anyway. I'm glad she didn't quit!
Don't give up, okay? I'm really admiring you for doing what you do. As you, my native tongue isn't English and when I try to write in English, it comes out as... flat and boring. Your story, though, is nice. Of course, it's not perfect but everyone can improve. You could try to get a beta (they have good ones on fp) !
Honestly, I (and I'm sure others as well) really like your story.
Nice chapter, anyway. I'm glad she didn't quit!
11/25/2009 c10 2Its.Not.Me.Its.You
lovers it!
cant wait for more!
hope you update soon!
happy gobble gobble (turkey)day incase you dont update before then
-ifly*hugs*
2Its.Not.Me.Its.Youlovers it!
cant wait for more!
hope you update soon!
happy gobble gobble (turkey)day incase you dont update before then
-ifly*hugs*
11/25/2009 c10 Ishita2u
Pls... do continue
There's nothing wrong in writing in ur native tongue... i mean English is my third language n i dont mind reading or writing in it... n believe me ur writing isnt bad as u have been lead to believe... n who ever tells u to stop writing in this language tell them to take their advice shove it in the ass...
stop minding wat ppl say... thats all i can suggest .
i cant force u to do anything u dont want... but plss do continue...
N to all those ppl who r advising her to stop writing in Eng. Plss she invites constructive criticism and not discouragement.
thank u
Plss Update
Ishita
Pls... do continue
There's nothing wrong in writing in ur native tongue... i mean English is my third language n i dont mind reading or writing in it... n believe me ur writing isnt bad as u have been lead to believe... n who ever tells u to stop writing in this language tell them to take their advice shove it in the ass...
stop minding wat ppl say... thats all i can suggest .
i cant force u to do anything u dont want... but plss do continue...
N to all those ppl who r advising her to stop writing in Eng. Plss she invites constructive criticism and not discouragement.
thank u
Plss Update
Ishita
11/25/2009 c10 sonia
You really shouldn't be discouraged. Your english is really good and the storyline is wonderful. I've been waiting for an update for some time now and the only suggestion I have is to post fast! I want to know what's going to happen! You're very talented - keep up the amazing work!
You really shouldn't be discouraged. Your english is really good and the storyline is wonderful. I've been waiting for an update for some time now and the only suggestion I have is to post fast! I want to know what's going to happen! You're very talented - keep up the amazing work!
11/25/2009 c10 1Kid of Colors
I really don't think you have so many mistakes where it takes away interest from the story. Whoever believes a few mistakes makes it less interresting must ba a grammar nazi or something...please continue your story!
1Kid of ColorsI really don't think you have so many mistakes where it takes away interest from the story. Whoever believes a few mistakes makes it less interresting must ba a grammar nazi or something...please continue your story!