for Friendly Warnings7/25/2011 c1 
3Not Abigale
What? This can't be finish! :O Stop these games and update this!
Side Note: Interesting :)
3Not AbigaleWhat? This can't be finish! :O Stop these games and update this!
Side Note: Interesting :)
5/14/2010 c1 3WishmiesterBeta
I like that this is a one shot with a cliff hanger ending. Usually in one shots, everything wraps up to a (usually happy) conclusion at the end and that gets old pretty fast. That being said, I like the characters. Scott in particular. I really like that name.
Anyway, its always nice to read something written in third person.
3WishmiesterBetaI like that this is a one shot with a cliff hanger ending. Usually in one shots, everything wraps up to a (usually happy) conclusion at the end and that gets old pretty fast. That being said, I like the characters. Scott in particular. I really like that name.
Anyway, its always nice to read something written in third person.
2/15/2010 c1 Wolf Cola
" 'So get off your high horse because this whore knows what he’s doing. "
I really, really liked this line for some reason. Your dialogue was so fluid and the way Ricky and Scott interacted was so real and like. Natural. This was absolute brilliance. It has my love.
" 'So get off your high horse because this whore knows what he’s doing. "
I really, really liked this line for some reason. Your dialogue was so fluid and the way Ricky and Scott interacted was so real and like. Natural. This was absolute brilliance. It has my love.
11/4/2009 c1 1Dare Ambrose
I really like this. The way Ricky and Scott flow with each other is very entertaining.
As a note. You lapsed in to first person during the scene where Ricky went and ordered a coke in the bar right before the teenager began to hit on Scott. It lasted for about four or five sentences I think.
Coincidently my name is Kelsey as well, only I have that extra 'e' before the 'y'. This is only the secodn or thrid story I've seen this name used in actually. lol.
Hope you found that helpful!
Happy Writing!
-Dare
1Dare AmbroseI really like this. The way Ricky and Scott flow with each other is very entertaining.
As a note. You lapsed in to first person during the scene where Ricky went and ordered a coke in the bar right before the teenager began to hit on Scott. It lasted for about four or five sentences I think.
Coincidently my name is Kelsey as well, only I have that extra 'e' before the 'y'. This is only the secodn or thrid story I've seen this name used in actually. lol.
Hope you found that helpful!
Happy Writing!
-Dare