for My Dearest Emily10/18/2010 c1 
2Elsbeth Lagrange
I very much enjoyed this! I really liked the use of the letter; I like getting indirectly in a character's head and filling in the blanks for myself.
One little quibble, in an effort to be constructive: Instead of "bode my time," my dictionary suggests "bided my time."
Someone else already said this reminded them of Pride and Prejudice, but I think this was more pay-off for less work, so that was nice. Thanks for posting!
2Elsbeth LagrangeI very much enjoyed this! I really liked the use of the letter; I like getting indirectly in a character's head and filling in the blanks for myself.
One little quibble, in an effort to be constructive: Instead of "bode my time," my dictionary suggests "bided my time."
Someone else already said this reminded them of Pride and Prejudice, but I think this was more pay-off for less work, so that was nice. Thanks for posting!
7/17/2010 c1 23AvidWriter-92
Ah, I love this so much. :D Honestly, this was a wonderful read! :)
I am in love with the 1800's time-setting, mostly because of the more formal tone of speech. I think it's very romantic and beautiful to read. :)
I really loved the way that you've written this. It captures the tone and setting very well, and I love Mr. Lockholm's letter. It was very touching, and very, very well written. :D
I thought that this oneshot felt very complete for having a wordcount limit. The descriptions were the reason behind this, I think...
I would have liked to see more interactions between Emily and Mr. Lockholm, because the last part seemed a bit rushed...
I loved the ending bit about her hand being scarred, and Mr. Lockholm not caring. :) That made me smile. :)
Overall, I adored this. :D I bet that you could make this into a story, if you really wanted to. I would be a faithful reader. ;)
~Avid, via the Roadhouse. :D Returning reviews... 1/1. :D
23AvidWriter-92Ah, I love this so much. :D Honestly, this was a wonderful read! :)
I am in love with the 1800's time-setting, mostly because of the more formal tone of speech. I think it's very romantic and beautiful to read. :)
I really loved the way that you've written this. It captures the tone and setting very well, and I love Mr. Lockholm's letter. It was very touching, and very, very well written. :D
I thought that this oneshot felt very complete for having a wordcount limit. The descriptions were the reason behind this, I think...
I would have liked to see more interactions between Emily and Mr. Lockholm, because the last part seemed a bit rushed...
I loved the ending bit about her hand being scarred, and Mr. Lockholm not caring. :) That made me smile. :)
Overall, I adored this. :D I bet that you could make this into a story, if you really wanted to. I would be a faithful reader. ;)
~Avid, via the Roadhouse. :D Returning reviews... 1/1. :D
3/24/2010 c1 4lookingwest
From WRR
I was drawn to this because it had my name as one of the characters!
Right away in the beginning I can tell that this man writing has a certain type of discourse that I think you stick continuously with throughout the rest of the piece. This is great, because it shows consistency, and it also right away gives me an indication that the character has been thought out and has a certain degree of education, ect. I think your word choice was very precise and I enjoyed the lofty language, you act as though the reader is fully aware of this sort of society, it reminded me kind of like Henry James, the author ^_^.
Again, after the letter I think you still hold that same sort of narrative voice and when you dive right into Emily's point of view I think you stick with it very well and it feels as though we already know the character, just from hearing the letter. At the same time I think your setting and even that whole second part is just very tense, as we await her reaction.
Didn't see the hand thing coming, which was the greatest twist ever in this situation, so I was glad to see it. Overall, this was a nice romantic piece that filled me with lots of warm fuzzies! And I found no grammar/spelling mistakes either, so your writing style and editing was very well done.
4lookingwestFrom WRR
I was drawn to this because it had my name as one of the characters!
Right away in the beginning I can tell that this man writing has a certain type of discourse that I think you stick continuously with throughout the rest of the piece. This is great, because it shows consistency, and it also right away gives me an indication that the character has been thought out and has a certain degree of education, ect. I think your word choice was very precise and I enjoyed the lofty language, you act as though the reader is fully aware of this sort of society, it reminded me kind of like Henry James, the author ^_^.
Again, after the letter I think you still hold that same sort of narrative voice and when you dive right into Emily's point of view I think you stick with it very well and it feels as though we already know the character, just from hearing the letter. At the same time I think your setting and even that whole second part is just very tense, as we await her reaction.
Didn't see the hand thing coming, which was the greatest twist ever in this situation, so I was glad to see it. Overall, this was a nice romantic piece that filled me with lots of warm fuzzies! And I found no grammar/spelling mistakes either, so your writing style and editing was very well done.
11/8/2009 c1 1Angel-Leigh Jones
hiya
wow that was so good. It could even be a whole story with their backgrounds and all that. Love, love, love it... More please :) You have a knack for this historical type writing.
Angel
1Angel-Leigh Joneshiya
wow that was so good. It could even be a whole story with their backgrounds and all that. Love, love, love it... More please :) You have a knack for this historical type writing.
Angel
11/8/2009 c1 Sophiesix
Gorgeous!
You had me wondering at the beginning there whether he was being entirely honest or not, but i think that adds to teh piece because it echoes emily's doubts. I love the final revelation, (and how you led up to it), and it leaves me wanting more - how did it happen, and are those two fingers significant? It had me thinking of previous suitors...
Good luck for the WCC :) !
Gorgeous!
You had me wondering at the beginning there whether he was being entirely honest or not, but i think that adds to teh piece because it echoes emily's doubts. I love the final revelation, (and how you led up to it), and it leaves me wanting more - how did it happen, and are those two fingers significant? It had me thinking of previous suitors...
Good luck for the WCC :) !
11/8/2009 c1 21Sercus Kaynine
Aw! How romantic! I loved the chivalrous and amusing tone of Lockholm's letter, and his final meeting with Emily was so sweet I wanted to cry. This was a very heartfelt piece. :)
Good job and good luck in WCC this month!
21Sercus KaynineAw! How romantic! I loved the chivalrous and amusing tone of Lockholm's letter, and his final meeting with Emily was so sweet I wanted to cry. This was a very heartfelt piece. :)
Good job and good luck in WCC this month!