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2/20/2010 c1 612simpleplan13
"my subcontious and nest there"... subconscious

The middle part seemed odd to me. You formatted them like a poem in the middle of a prose. I'm guessing it was intentional, but it confused me. Was that the poem you wrote them?

The ending also confused me a lot. Was the whole first part a dream? Where did the good poem turn into an awkward one? I was just kind of lost about how that connected to the first part.

I did like the piece though. I think it was really sweet. I also liked the writing it was very poetic even in prose. Nice job.

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