for I'm Not Dead!: Black as Blood6/1/2010 c5 
12Green Gummy Bear
I really like this. Please don't stop writing it.
Does the boy play a bigger role? Later?
12Green Gummy BearI really like this. Please don't stop writing it.
Does the boy play a bigger role? Later?
11/21/2009 c1 WutNow
Here from Roadhouse!
I haven't read the other story that's connected to this one, but since you wanted review for this story I'm going to.
First of all- WOW. I'm hooked. I'm not a huge fan of fantasy stories or the supernatural, but since these guys look human, it makes me visualize the characters more. (Ask anyone at Roadhouse- I suck at fantasy lol).
I liked how the chapter opens up in a battle. They both are promising characters, and they both seemed really strong. I liked the comeback in the end. I was like "Oh! pwn" sort of lol!
Oh, remember. When someone is talking, it's a comma not a period. Here's one of the errors I found:
Let go of me Christophe.” I exclaim, struggling to break free of the darkness that surrounds me.- add comma after Cristophe.
I dont know why, but this light vs dark thing reminds me of D.N Angel lol.
Overall, great job!
-Agent
Here from Roadhouse!
I haven't read the other story that's connected to this one, but since you wanted review for this story I'm going to.
First of all- WOW. I'm hooked. I'm not a huge fan of fantasy stories or the supernatural, but since these guys look human, it makes me visualize the characters more. (Ask anyone at Roadhouse- I suck at fantasy lol).
I liked how the chapter opens up in a battle. They both are promising characters, and they both seemed really strong. I liked the comeback in the end. I was like "Oh! pwn" sort of lol!
Oh, remember. When someone is talking, it's a comma not a period. Here's one of the errors I found:
Let go of me Christophe.” I exclaim, struggling to break free of the darkness that surrounds me.- add comma after Cristophe.
I dont know why, but this light vs dark thing reminds me of D.N Angel lol.
Overall, great job!
-Agent