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11/16/2009 c1 at the bottom of everything
this is really, really sweet, i like it a lot.

the only part that throws me off is the "hershey's cup of love" part, it's kind of cliched, and i think you could think of something more specific or meaningful. [also, sorry to be annoyingly technical, but what is a hershey's cup? there's a hershey's kiss and a reese's cup... maybe i'm missing something lol sorry if i am].

but aside from that, i love this poem, i think its very sweet and sincere. good work!

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