for The Orphan11/20/2009 c1 Isca
"Her lips, blue-cracked canyon walls." This line is ripe with colourful imagery.
I like that the speaker coughed out her pain - as if she was choking on it - as if it made her inarticulate. :)
"Her lips, blue-cracked canyon walls." This line is ripe with colourful imagery.
I like that the speaker coughed out her pain - as if she was choking on it - as if it made her inarticulate. :)
11/19/2009 c1 
55OneSilverWing
Beautiful, in all meanings of the phrase. I could see everything, even smell it.
55OneSilverWingBeautiful, in all meanings of the phrase. I could see everything, even smell it.