for The Weight Of The Worlds11/16/2012 c1 richardp3
This is one of the best stories I have read in a long time.
I must read more of the same.I love these kings and cool names.
This is one of the best stories I have read in a long time.
I must read more of the same.I love these kings and cool names.
10/15/2011 c40 
2The.Violent.Spazz
I am IN love with this story. Your first chapter got me really into it, with her teleporting into Unicorn land. At first, I really though she was going to end up with Jaxin. But now, I'm really glad she didn't. And then came the twist with Darryn and Gail. Every chapter kept me on the edge of my seat. And I read this on a two day period. :)
At the begining, when she was getting the Gem back from the pixies, it was very interesting. With all the details, it felt like you were there with here. In that cold, wet, claustrophobic cave you created.
And then came the war.
When Darryn came, I fell in love with him. He was an amazing character that fit really well with Kiri. And When Fiona got imprisoned, I was really worried about how you were going to end this war and get her out of imprisoned-ment.
When you did end the war, I was literally on the verge of crying. I couldn't believe Darryn died. I got on choked up and my eyes were getting watery. I couldn't cry though, I had about four other people in the room with me. :3
But really, Darryn 'died'. I just couldn't process that and with Jaxin becoming king, and Kiri going through mental/emotional breakdown. It was saddening.
And he showed up.
I was estastic! I was like "YESSSS! YESSSSS! YESHHHHHH! WOOHOO!" It felt great to know he was still alive.
So I thank you for writing this. One of the best works on Fictionpress so far. Especailly, since it's completely.
Fiona became THE sorcerer.
Jaxin became THE king.
Kiri and Darryn lived happily ever after.
xD I can't believe it's over.
2The.Violent.SpazzI am IN love with this story. Your first chapter got me really into it, with her teleporting into Unicorn land. At first, I really though she was going to end up with Jaxin. But now, I'm really glad she didn't. And then came the twist with Darryn and Gail. Every chapter kept me on the edge of my seat. And I read this on a two day period. :)
At the begining, when she was getting the Gem back from the pixies, it was very interesting. With all the details, it felt like you were there with here. In that cold, wet, claustrophobic cave you created.
And then came the war.
When Darryn came, I fell in love with him. He was an amazing character that fit really well with Kiri. And When Fiona got imprisoned, I was really worried about how you were going to end this war and get her out of imprisoned-ment.
When you did end the war, I was literally on the verge of crying. I couldn't believe Darryn died. I got on choked up and my eyes were getting watery. I couldn't cry though, I had about four other people in the room with me. :3
But really, Darryn 'died'. I just couldn't process that and with Jaxin becoming king, and Kiri going through mental/emotional breakdown. It was saddening.
And he showed up.
I was estastic! I was like "YESSSS! YESSSSS! YESHHHHHH! WOOHOO!" It felt great to know he was still alive.
So I thank you for writing this. One of the best works on Fictionpress so far. Especailly, since it's completely.
Fiona became THE sorcerer.
Jaxin became THE king.
Kiri and Darryn lived happily ever after.
xD I can't believe it's over.
11/12/2010 c40 Jade August
Great story! I liked the ending, it really tied everything together, and Kiri is happy in the end, even if it was a little cliche. A job well done!
Great story! I liked the ending, it really tied everything together, and Kiri is happy in the end, even if it was a little cliche. A job well done!
10/12/2010 c40 31HeroofEnelios
This was a truely good ending. It really felt like the ending of a book or some novel and it was very good. I really enjoyed reading this story, great job.
31HeroofEneliosThis was a truely good ending. It really felt like the ending of a book or some novel and it was very good. I really enjoyed reading this story, great job.
10/7/2010 c39 31HeroofEnelios
Kiri really SHOULD be happy. She deserves it after everything she's been through. Darryn and Kiri are great together and the fact that Kiri was able to cover for the both of them in front of her mom was great. I can't wait to read more!
31HeroofEneliosKiri really SHOULD be happy. She deserves it after everything she's been through. Darryn and Kiri are great together and the fact that Kiri was able to cover for the both of them in front of her mom was great. I can't wait to read more!
10/5/2010 c38 HeroofEnelios
Sorry it took so long to read every chapter, sometimes I can be a real slow reader. Now then. I like Jaxin still but I like Darryn more, because he seems right for Kiri. That's just the way I feel but others may disagree...:(
Really great story right now and is there more coming? I'll be waiting for more of your writing. :)
Sorry it took so long to read every chapter, sometimes I can be a real slow reader. Now then. I like Jaxin still but I like Darryn more, because he seems right for Kiri. That's just the way I feel but others may disagree...:(
Really great story right now and is there more coming? I'll be waiting for more of your writing. :)
10/4/2010 c6 HeroofEnelios
Jaxins is a really interesting character and I'm really interested to read more. Great chapter!
Jaxins is a really interesting character and I'm really interested to read more. Great chapter!
10/4/2010 c5 HeroofEnelios
I still like Zyon, now for being so upfront with the king who by the way I don't completely trust if I were in Kiri's shoes. Nice!
I still like Zyon, now for being so upfront with the king who by the way I don't completely trust if I were in Kiri's shoes. Nice!
10/4/2010 c4 HeroofEnelios
I like Zyon for some reason, I don't know why exactly. But I do know one thing: I am enjoying this story. Great chapter yet again!
I like Zyon for some reason, I don't know why exactly. But I do know one thing: I am enjoying this story. Great chapter yet again!
10/4/2010 c3 HeroofEnelios
So Kiri has something to do with this event, or is involved even though she might not know it? Oh boy. Great chapter!
So Kiri has something to do with this event, or is involved even though she might not know it? Oh boy. Great chapter!
10/4/2010 c2 HeroofEnelios
This is really interesting! I like how each scene is written. Well written they are and I like this a lot so far. :)
This is really interesting! I like how each scene is written. Well written they are and I like this a lot so far. :)
10/4/2010 c1 HeroofEnelios
"the Gem of…um…something or other."
Heh heh, things like that always make me laugh. Wow, this is a really good first chapter, and has caught my attention. I'm going to read the other chapters you have (or at least as many as I can get to tonight). Great job!
"the Gem of…um…something or other."
Heh heh, things like that always make me laugh. Wow, this is a really good first chapter, and has caught my attention. I'm going to read the other chapters you have (or at least as many as I can get to tonight). Great job!