for account closed12/2/2009 c1 
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down went Alice after it, never once considering how in the world she was to get out again.
5i think that maybedown went Alice after it, never once considering how in the world she was to get out again.
12/1/2009 c2 6letyoursoultakeflight
I dont know how to describe this, but I just love how refreshing this all is. Again, I love your style! And how you weave everything in and all the descriptions you use... I dont know how you do it but I'm so glad you do!
6letyoursoultakeflightI dont know how to describe this, but I just love how refreshing this all is. Again, I love your style! And how you weave everything in and all the descriptions you use... I dont know how you do it but I'm so glad you do!
12/1/2009 c1 letyoursoultakeflight
Okay I am so inlove with how you structured this and all the fonts etc etc and so on! Lovely! You conveyed everything so well and I love oyur style :)
Okay I am so inlove with how you structured this and all the fonts etc etc and so on! Lovely! You conveyed everything so well and I love oyur style :)
11/29/2009 c2 Isca
"She wakes up in unfamiliar houses; finds herself behind a stranger's desk." I adore this opening line - it's quite intriguing.
"She feels him - atoms swirling." Wow. What a vivid image.
"You're bound baby, not burning." I like that 'bonds' seem safer than 'burning' for the speaker - as if some forms of pain are kinder than others.
"'With bones like ours, we aren't meant to be touched. Held." Holy cow. This is one of the best lines I've read in awhile - it's incredible! :D
"'Calm down, child. Again, from the top now.'" I love that mature tone of the boy's voice - it's so sensual.
Keep up the great work!
"She wakes up in unfamiliar houses; finds herself behind a stranger's desk." I adore this opening line - it's quite intriguing.
"She feels him - atoms swirling." Wow. What a vivid image.
"You're bound baby, not burning." I like that 'bonds' seem safer than 'burning' for the speaker - as if some forms of pain are kinder than others.
"'With bones like ours, we aren't meant to be touched. Held." Holy cow. This is one of the best lines I've read in awhile - it's incredible! :D
"'Calm down, child. Again, from the top now.'" I love that mature tone of the boy's voice - it's so sensual.
Keep up the great work!
11/29/2009 c1 Isca
"But he is here and close." I like the angsty tone of this line.
"Lower/Lover." Hah. How creative. :)
"You fall into the rabbithole." This line is very mature and profound (and I like the way it seemed to connect to the 'you call him icarus' line).
"I will break for you." Wow...
"He calls her Poe." What a cheeky, devilish ending. I like it. ;)
"But he is here and close." I like the angsty tone of this line.
"Lower/Lover." Hah. How creative. :)
"You fall into the rabbithole." This line is very mature and profound (and I like the way it seemed to connect to the 'you call him icarus' line).
"I will break for you." Wow...
"He calls her Poe." What a cheeky, devilish ending. I like it. ;)