for Double Vision4/9/2010 c19 MyNameIs-Madison
:)
Will is still number one in my heart ...damn if only he were real *sigh*...Adam too...ANYWAYS
If it makes you happy , then I was totally shocked at the revelation .
But honestly I wasn't .
It was still awesome.
Adam is such a tease saying that he wants to kiss her and doesn't .
If I were in her position , I'd be begging in my head for him to do it , too .
But o'well .
I had a feeling that he was kidnapped .
I don't think Adam should call the police on the baby snatchers .
What's done is done.
Yes they were desperate and crazy and a bit pathetic , but still .
Putting them in jail won't change them .
It would make them sorry .
I guess.
I don't think she will able to resist Adam .
People tend to want what they can't have or what think they can't have .
It is in our nature .
I am not sure how Jack is really like ( you should write more about who he is as a person , just a suggestion. Maybe Adam asks her what he was like and so on ) but I would think that he would want her to be happy with who she want to be with , even if it is his long lost brother who was snatched away by crazies at birth...
So will it be Will or Adam , or neither ?
Maybe she will be a tease towards Will and or Adam .
Play with their hearts even more?
Dig herself a deeper hole ?
I hope that nothing bad happens to Elaine on her way to Willowbank.
I always hear or in this case read that "shit hit the fan" or " shit meet fan".
Can you please explain what this means?
I have my ideas but I am still curious .
You are not a rubbish person .
I wish you luck .
ANYWAYS
GREAT JOB
&
GOOD LUCK WITH ( insert whatever you want )
WILL IS #1( I am so subtle )
:)
Will is still number one in my heart ...damn if only he were real *sigh*...Adam too...ANYWAYS
If it makes you happy , then I was totally shocked at the revelation .
But honestly I wasn't .
It was still awesome.
Adam is such a tease saying that he wants to kiss her and doesn't .
If I were in her position , I'd be begging in my head for him to do it , too .
But o'well .
I had a feeling that he was kidnapped .
I don't think Adam should call the police on the baby snatchers .
What's done is done.
Yes they were desperate and crazy and a bit pathetic , but still .
Putting them in jail won't change them .
It would make them sorry .
I guess.
I don't think she will able to resist Adam .
People tend to want what they can't have or what think they can't have .
It is in our nature .
I am not sure how Jack is really like ( you should write more about who he is as a person , just a suggestion. Maybe Adam asks her what he was like and so on ) but I would think that he would want her to be happy with who she want to be with , even if it is his long lost brother who was snatched away by crazies at birth...
So will it be Will or Adam , or neither ?
Maybe she will be a tease towards Will and or Adam .
Play with their hearts even more?
Dig herself a deeper hole ?
I hope that nothing bad happens to Elaine on her way to Willowbank.
I always hear or in this case read that "shit hit the fan" or " shit meet fan".
Can you please explain what this means?
I have my ideas but I am still curious .
You are not a rubbish person .
I wish you luck .
ANYWAYS
GREAT JOB
&
GOOD LUCK WITH ( insert whatever you want )
WILL IS #1( I am so subtle )
4/9/2010 c19 
1sortakate
:D This pleased me once more. If this was a book, Omg I totally would buy it and like, recommend it to all my friends. I already have recommended your fiction press version of it to them. And they of course love it as well! I have to admit, I did get a little teary-eyed in this chapter, It was just emotionally beautiful, and you are doing a fantastic job with this story. I really love it, and its just, so amazing, and so enjoyable, and I get so freaking excited when you update! Thanks for updating! :D
1sortakate:D This pleased me once more. If this was a book, Omg I totally would buy it and like, recommend it to all my friends. I already have recommended your fiction press version of it to them. And they of course love it as well! I have to admit, I did get a little teary-eyed in this chapter, It was just emotionally beautiful, and you are doing a fantastic job with this story. I really love it, and its just, so amazing, and so enjoyable, and I get so freaking excited when you update! Thanks for updating! :D
3/31/2010 c18 1scarletfleur
acoustic versions are always much better! :) love that song.
and fall for you - secondhand serenade. cute song
i agree with summer. neither of them are being particularly great at the moment. i reckon a bad-ass should enrol. they can become best friends and make them both jealous! rock the boat! HA! they'd deserve that. and it's a very 90210-thing to do. :)
1scarletfleuracoustic versions are always much better! :) love that song.
and fall for you - secondhand serenade. cute song
i agree with summer. neither of them are being particularly great at the moment. i reckon a bad-ass should enrol. they can become best friends and make them both jealous! rock the boat! HA! they'd deserve that. and it's a very 90210-thing to do. :)
3/31/2010 c18 3cndysweetmss
This story is so great. Please keep writing more. You may be a author one day.
3cndysweetmssThis story is so great. Please keep writing more. You may be a author one day.
3/31/2010 c18 2babykezyx
Oh my gosh! I'm absolutely in LOVE with this chapter! Ah :D XP
I think I love Will too...haha I'm weird, I know. He's just too amazing.
Just to add, I think the story would be refreshing if Summer didn't chose either of them - It would be too obvious if she chooses Adam and I think it would be awkward if she chose Will so soon because obviously she doesn't understand how she feels yet. But anyway, keep up the good work! :D :D :D I just love this story :)
Hm...what do I think Adams parents are going to say? Well, I suspect that at birth, Adam was swapped at birth with their real child (who, unfortunatly died) and so Jake's mum really thought Jake's twin did die but really it was the real son of Adams parents who died.
But I think it would be nice if the truth was something really unexpected and not obvious...oh, and sorry this review is like really long but can we have some more cute memories with Summer and Jake - I think their really sweet. Especially the one when they were drunk and they broke the knome and then Jack told her he loved her. That was so cute :D
Sorry, I'm getting off the subject - please update soon. Thanx x :)
2babykezyxOh my gosh! I'm absolutely in LOVE with this chapter! Ah :D XP
I think I love Will too...haha I'm weird, I know. He's just too amazing.
Just to add, I think the story would be refreshing if Summer didn't chose either of them - It would be too obvious if she chooses Adam and I think it would be awkward if she chose Will so soon because obviously she doesn't understand how she feels yet. But anyway, keep up the good work! :D :D :D I just love this story :)
Hm...what do I think Adams parents are going to say? Well, I suspect that at birth, Adam was swapped at birth with their real child (who, unfortunatly died) and so Jake's mum really thought Jake's twin did die but really it was the real son of Adams parents who died.
But I think it would be nice if the truth was something really unexpected and not obvious...oh, and sorry this review is like really long but can we have some more cute memories with Summer and Jake - I think their really sweet. Especially the one when they were drunk and they broke the knome and then Jack told her he loved her. That was so cute :D
Sorry, I'm getting off the subject - please update soon. Thanx x :)
3/30/2010 c18 MyNameIs-Madison
Evil child .
Just kidding .
Lets see...Yet another great chapter .
Will/Adam showdown is one thing you gotta love . So will it be sweet /kind and (someone who could be or seem if the chance occurred ) possessive and overprotective and have anger probs maybe , but awesome all at the same time .Or will it be popular , undercover sweet /kind ,misunderstood boy , who just want to be the real him in a world of fakes ?
Either one I will be okay with . But then you gotta love twists. but still WILL is NUMBER ONE . no matter what .
I really didn't expect for Adam's parents to come. It is very sudden .
Anyways ,
Great Job
&
Good Luck
WILL IS NUMBER ONE
Evil child .
Just kidding .
Lets see...Yet another great chapter .
Will/Adam showdown is one thing you gotta love . So will it be sweet /kind and (someone who could be or seem if the chance occurred ) possessive and overprotective and have anger probs maybe , but awesome all at the same time .Or will it be popular , undercover sweet /kind ,misunderstood boy , who just want to be the real him in a world of fakes ?
Either one I will be okay with . But then you gotta love twists. but still WILL is NUMBER ONE . no matter what .
I really didn't expect for Adam's parents to come. It is very sudden .
Anyways ,
Great Job
&
Good Luck
WILL IS NUMBER ONE
3/30/2010 c18 1TheStereotypicalBlonde
Oh, I love your story! And it's hard to choose between the two guys, but I think I'd pick Will. Just because Adam wouldn't be healthy for her, considering the whole Jack situation :(
1TheStereotypicalBlondeOh, I love your story! And it's hard to choose between the two guys, but I think I'd pick Will. Just because Adam wouldn't be healthy for her, considering the whole Jack situation :(
3/30/2010 c18 xspringdaizyx
yes, i am definitely enjoying this!
i cannot wait until next chapter.. :)
YIPPE!
yes, i am definitely enjoying this!
i cannot wait until next chapter.. :)
YIPPE!
3/30/2010 c18 1sortakate
This was fabulous. As always. Thank you for updating! I was like, so happy. This made my day! :D I love this!
1sortakateThis was fabulous. As always. Thank you for updating! I was like, so happy. This made my day! :D I love this!
3/30/2010 c18 4Crystal Red Roses
YOU LEFT ME ON A CLIFFY! gr Ella, i thought you loved us :( but hey, i adored this chapter, drama drama drama, and i think adam is about to get a very interesting piece of info :P Anyhoo im glad you updated and i cannot wait for your next installment, well im off to write a paper now
4Crystal Red RosesYOU LEFT ME ON A CLIFFY! gr Ella, i thought you loved us :( but hey, i adored this chapter, drama drama drama, and i think adam is about to get a very interesting piece of info :P Anyhoo im glad you updated and i cannot wait for your next installment, well im off to write a paper now
3/30/2010 c18 ACKLAX3
ah i LOVED this chapter! i kinda have to vote for adam;) hahaha but dont worry i loved the drama! and i think that his parents are going to admit he was adopted? idk cant wait for more:D
ah i LOVED this chapter! i kinda have to vote for adam;) hahaha but dont worry i loved the drama! and i think that his parents are going to admit he was adopted? idk cant wait for more:D
3/21/2010 c17 Alaarakk
Wow! You really love to put your characters down don't you? How many times has Summer been called a skank and whore? About eleven? The poor girl. The others mightn't like her but really there is no need for everyone to resort to such childish name-calling of the sexual kind unless of course you're a big tough fifteen year old who thinks she's king shit of the school yard? Honestly! If you're young, you're age is really showing.
On the other side the story line is quite intriguing but not understanding the characters and why they behave the way that they do is confusing. You need to pad your characters out, give us some history that explains why they are the way they are. Does Will come from a broken home? Does Becca have brothers? Has Elisa screwed some other guys on campus? Did Adam grow up lonely with Nannies and parents who were never there? Did his mother always treat him like dirt? You've got a story but you need to round it out. The only one you've done that on is Jack and he's dead.
So yeah that's my thoughts and I will keep pursuing with the reading of it but it needs substance. Why does Freddie think he can get away with drugging and rape? What happened in his past to make him like that? What happened to the girl that was raped? Where the hell are the Teachers and people in authority? I also think this story would be much, much more beleivable set in a college not high school as the themes you are dealing with are adult matters. At eighteen years of age teachers, parents and people in authority would still have a hand in the matter. It's unrealistic to expect them not too. Also Adam calls the police to campus but doesn't notify the principal of the school or anyone else that something has happened? In real life that's quite wrong. Very very wrong espeically in eighteen year old kids. Also, no boarding school is going to let kids live alone in a house of their own. A college cmapus would be different.
Okay enough rambling and sorry if I sound harsh but I just wanted to highlight how un-realistc your story is in parts.
Wow! You really love to put your characters down don't you? How many times has Summer been called a skank and whore? About eleven? The poor girl. The others mightn't like her but really there is no need for everyone to resort to such childish name-calling of the sexual kind unless of course you're a big tough fifteen year old who thinks she's king shit of the school yard? Honestly! If you're young, you're age is really showing.
On the other side the story line is quite intriguing but not understanding the characters and why they behave the way that they do is confusing. You need to pad your characters out, give us some history that explains why they are the way they are. Does Will come from a broken home? Does Becca have brothers? Has Elisa screwed some other guys on campus? Did Adam grow up lonely with Nannies and parents who were never there? Did his mother always treat him like dirt? You've got a story but you need to round it out. The only one you've done that on is Jack and he's dead.
So yeah that's my thoughts and I will keep pursuing with the reading of it but it needs substance. Why does Freddie think he can get away with drugging and rape? What happened in his past to make him like that? What happened to the girl that was raped? Where the hell are the Teachers and people in authority? I also think this story would be much, much more beleivable set in a college not high school as the themes you are dealing with are adult matters. At eighteen years of age teachers, parents and people in authority would still have a hand in the matter. It's unrealistic to expect them not too. Also Adam calls the police to campus but doesn't notify the principal of the school or anyone else that something has happened? In real life that's quite wrong. Very very wrong espeically in eighteen year old kids. Also, no boarding school is going to let kids live alone in a house of their own. A college cmapus would be different.
Okay enough rambling and sorry if I sound harsh but I just wanted to highlight how un-realistc your story is in parts.
3/19/2010 c17 xspringdaizyx
oh
my
GOSH!
i seriously loved it hahah!
i die a little everytime i see the authors not/review :)
oh
my
GOSH!
i seriously loved it hahah!
i die a little everytime i see the authors not/review :)