for Mime1/9/2010 c1 XInternetsXBitchX
This reminds me of that story with the donkey ears and the grass ... you know with the secret .. or is it just me .. ok shutting up now.
This is so true ... I hate it when peeps tell you secrets you cant tell ... because they feel better cos they told .. but you cant tell .. so in the end you tell your dog lol
This reminds me of that story with the donkey ears and the grass ... you know with the secret .. or is it just me .. ok shutting up now.
This is so true ... I hate it when peeps tell you secrets you cant tell ... because they feel better cos they told .. but you cant tell .. so in the end you tell your dog lol
12/27/2009 c1 
173Little girl Big world
I really like the comparison. Nicely done!
"Will come flowing out
Of my unzipped mouth"
That leaves a great picture in my mind, wonderful :)
173Little girl Big worldI really like the comparison. Nicely done!
"Will come flowing out
Of my unzipped mouth"
That leaves a great picture in my mind, wonderful :)
12/13/2009 c1 11Kuyoko
Sweet Jezuz! :D I loved that! That's how I feel sometimes, so it really hit me. ^^
11KuyokoSweet Jezuz! :D I loved that! That's how I feel sometimes, so it really hit me. ^^
12/10/2009 c1 37I am Lyhegnot
Ooh... -stares- Pretty.
That 'tis a very good extended metaphor. I never thought of it like that.
YAY! You wrote more to oblige my greediness! :]
37I am LyhegnotOoh... -stares- Pretty.
That 'tis a very good extended metaphor. I never thought of it like that.
YAY! You wrote more to oblige my greediness! :]
12/10/2009 c1 59Casino Kat
Okay, so I pretty much love this one (:
And I completely can relate to this one. I'm beginning to see a pattern, here. haha. :P
59Casino KatOkay, so I pretty much love this one (:
And I completely can relate to this one. I'm beginning to see a pattern, here. haha. :P
12/10/2009 c1 1DandylionWishes
AG!
You need you go back through this and capatolise every g'damn I thats not capatolised or I will hit you!
1DandylionWishesAG!
You need you go back through this and capatolise every g'damn I thats not capatolised or I will hit you!
12/10/2009 c1 178skyward squidly squee
Well. - I like the idea from the first seven lines. Then, I like the line "for if I do I will surely tell all the secrets you trusted me with".
Mm. Some of your word choice isn't the best. And I'm not a fan of the ... poems that stretch down really far in one stanza full of short lines. ;P I'm trying to be helpful, but of course you should write how you want to write; you'll grow and improve in your own way.
I like the mime idea. And the image I get from that. You have so much to say you didn't ask for, and now you're afraid to open your mouth at all.
Decent. :] Rawr.
- giant squid.
178skyward squidly squeeWell. - I like the idea from the first seven lines. Then, I like the line "for if I do I will surely tell all the secrets you trusted me with".
Mm. Some of your word choice isn't the best. And I'm not a fan of the ... poems that stretch down really far in one stanza full of short lines. ;P I'm trying to be helpful, but of course you should write how you want to write; you'll grow and improve in your own way.
I like the mime idea. And the image I get from that. You have so much to say you didn't ask for, and now you're afraid to open your mouth at all.
Decent. :] Rawr.
- giant squid.