for Red Wishes7/5/2010 c4 
7Charming Dice
You have a pretty diverse set of characrters, personality-wise. And I like their interaction. Your dialogue is really smooth and believable. Good stuff.
The one thing that bothered me is that some of your characters are pretty melodramatic. But I don't know if that's the usual for romance (especially manga romance) or not, so I can't say if it's a flaw or not.
Regardless, good stuff. I'll try to keep up with this.
7Charming DiceYou have a pretty diverse set of characrters, personality-wise. And I like their interaction. Your dialogue is really smooth and believable. Good stuff.
The one thing that bothered me is that some of your characters are pretty melodramatic. But I don't know if that's the usual for romance (especially manga romance) or not, so I can't say if it's a flaw or not.
Regardless, good stuff. I'll try to keep up with this.
7/5/2010 c2 Charming Dice
You know, I would love to go into critical reviewer mode, but I don't know a thing about romance stories. All I can say is that it was a nice read.
That fact that it's romance and I can stomach it is a miracle. So me actually liking it is really saying something.
You know, I would love to go into critical reviewer mode, but I don't know a thing about romance stories. All I can say is that it was a nice read.
That fact that it's romance and I can stomach it is a miracle. So me actually liking it is really saying something.
7/5/2010 c1 Charming Dice
Not bad. Not bad at all. Good to see you're still writing strong after all this time.
Not bad. Not bad at all. Good to see you're still writing strong after all this time.
6/27/2010 c1 cASsIe
Is this inspired by Absolute Boyfriend? It's really good!
Is this inspired by Absolute Boyfriend? It's really good!
6/24/2010 c4 3naito-kun
omg nosebleed at the end, what a twist! like the way this is turning out, i do hope akio goes with takeshi!
3naito-kunomg nosebleed at the end, what a twist! like the way this is turning out, i do hope akio goes with takeshi!
6/23/2010 c1 1Kaos Ninja9
This was pretty funny, I liked it a lot. Nice use of description. The little details, like the chocolate milkshake-like stain, really help give you a visual.Using the name Akio for a girl was cute. Since it's normally a boy's name, I thought it was a nice touch. Great story!
1Kaos Ninja9This was pretty funny, I liked it a lot. Nice use of description. The little details, like the chocolate milkshake-like stain, really help give you a visual.Using the name Akio for a girl was cute. Since it's normally a boy's name, I thought it was a nice touch. Great story!
6/10/2010 c3 3naito-kun
typo - think it should be boar instead of boor? well other than that, can't wait for the next chapter, i like how you ended this chapter with that cliffhanger ((:
3naito-kuntypo - think it should be boar instead of boor? well other than that, can't wait for the next chapter, i like how you ended this chapter with that cliffhanger ((:
6/10/2010 c2 naito-kun
i'm kind of confused as to who miyuki and satoru are, but the ending was just brilliant, nothing like a new boyfriend to spurn the ex! XD
i'm kind of confused as to who miyuki and satoru are, but the ending was just brilliant, nothing like a new boyfriend to spurn the ex! XD
6/10/2010 c1 naito-kun
omg nosebleed at the end, i lol-ed damn badly at that and the last line was just epic!
omg nosebleed at the end, i lol-ed damn badly at that and the last line was just epic!
6/8/2010 c3 Javin Pilotte
These recent chapters have been wonderful. Please keep writing and update soon. :D
These recent chapters have been wonderful. Please keep writing and update soon. :D
5/27/2010 c1 lili999
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