for desperation12/15/2009 c1 fleur de l'est
Oh wow! Nice wordplay =) I was expecting something slightly longer, but this is striking & effective. I liked the cummings-style centering & bolding of 'you'. Says so much.
And the lack of punctuation & apostrophe in "can't" shows the lack of effort when 'without you'.
Things fit so perfectly well.
Oh wow! Nice wordplay =) I was expecting something slightly longer, but this is striking & effective. I liked the cummings-style centering & bolding of 'you'. Says so much.
And the lack of punctuation & apostrophe in "can't" shows the lack of effort when 'without you'.
Things fit so perfectly well.
12/13/2009 c1 
121Wishdreamer89
I love these poems. They hold a depth without wasting time or wallowing. You give the truth and hold it, without the complications of long-winded phrases or anything. I love them.
121Wishdreamer89I love these poems. They hold a depth without wasting time or wallowing. You give the truth and hold it, without the complications of long-winded phrases or anything. I love them.