for Epic Poem2/24/2010 c1 Tawny Owl
Ok, I’m not good at reviewing poetry because it always feels like more of a free for all than prose.
This did make me smile though: all the periods gave it a curtness that was akin to that feeling you get of ‘oh, typical’. Especially with throwing the paper in the bin, missing and trying again. The details like the ‘perfect ball’ worked as well. There seemed to be a mix between the short words and longer sentences. I think I’d vote for a few more of the longer sentences to make the flow of it a bit more interesting and less jumpy. But I liked this, and the feeling it created of writing by yourself.
Ok, I’m not good at reviewing poetry because it always feels like more of a free for all than prose.
This did make me smile though: all the periods gave it a curtness that was akin to that feeling you get of ‘oh, typical’. Especially with throwing the paper in the bin, missing and trying again. The details like the ‘perfect ball’ worked as well. There seemed to be a mix between the short words and longer sentences. I think I’d vote for a few more of the longer sentences to make the flow of it a bit more interesting and less jumpy. But I liked this, and the feeling it created of writing by yourself.
12/17/2009 c1 
4A-Haven-For-Glass-Butterflies
And see? THis is how it is for me... Especially if you elaborate on the THROW AWAY THROW AWAY!
It's lovely, dear ;)
And thanx for reviewing my work as well!
Pocket :3
4A-Haven-For-Glass-ButterfliesAnd see? THis is how it is for me... Especially if you elaborate on the THROW AWAY THROW AWAY!
It's lovely, dear ;)
And thanx for reviewing my work as well!
Pocket :3
12/15/2009 c1 1the art of being obsolete
for me it's, fingers on keys, new document, empty head, delete, mess with it a bit, fix up, read, share with you, read again, fix up, delete or save. yeah.
but that's never poetic enough.
good work, good work.
1the art of being obsoletefor me it's, fingers on keys, new document, empty head, delete, mess with it a bit, fix up, read, share with you, read again, fix up, delete or save. yeah.
but that's never poetic enough.
good work, good work.
12/14/2009 c1 119i collect lullabies
Hello! I am here to and to your 'Total Win.'
I think this describes me very well when I write, and probably tons of other chatoc-brained people (I certainly hope I'm not the only one).
Excellent job. (:
119i collect lullabiesHello! I am here to and to your 'Total Win.'
I think this describes me very well when I write, and probably tons of other chatoc-brained people (I certainly hope I'm not the only one).
Excellent job. (: