for Please tell me3/15/2005 c1 Mirima89
Your story is good, however I think you should relook the way you have your punctuation needs a little editing, because yoru story doesn't have the right pauses in it. A Tip: Say it outloud to your self, or have some one else and note where the pause when speaking. Good Poem though.
Your story is good, however I think you should relook the way you have your punctuation needs a little editing, because yoru story doesn't have the right pauses in it. A Tip: Say it outloud to your self, or have some one else and note where the pause when speaking. Good Poem though.
3/15/2005 c1 
47JustBella
very nice. true, how sometimes we just need to be told we're sane, like we need reasurance. long but not boring, at least i don't think. but if things are't ok right now...well someday somehow they will.
47JustBellavery nice. true, how sometimes we just need to be told we're sane, like we need reasurance. long but not boring, at least i don't think. but if things are't ok right now...well someday somehow they will.
5/24/2002 c1 41WalkingOnWater
awww, a cry for help...all of the three poems i just read had some relationship between each other, rejection, being rejected, and a cry for help...its like a pattern...its very interesting in fact, because it shows that one poem isnt enough for a whole feeling, and sometimes you got to have a bunch of poems to express it, good job
41WalkingOnWaterawww, a cry for help...all of the three poems i just read had some relationship between each other, rejection, being rejected, and a cry for help...its like a pattern...its very interesting in fact, because it shows that one poem isnt enough for a whole feeling, and sometimes you got to have a bunch of poems to express it, good job
5/9/2001 c1 Vivian Tse
good msg to convey thru this poem. i agree that nowadays pple just seem to not care at all...where is all the love?
good msg to convey thru this poem. i agree that nowadays pple just seem to not care at all...where is all the love?
5/8/2001 c1 ssss
Not bad
Not bad