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3/15/2005 c1 Mirima89
Your story is good, however I think you should relook the way you have your punctuation needs a little editing, because yoru story doesn't have the right pauses in it. A Tip: Say it outloud to your self, or have some one else and note where the pause when speaking. Good Poem though.
3/15/2005 c1 47JustBella
very nice. true, how sometimes we just need to be told we're sane, like we need reasurance. long but not boring, at least i don't think. but if things are't ok right now...well someday somehow they will.
5/24/2002 c1 41WalkingOnWater
awww, a cry for help...all of the three poems i just read had some relationship between each other, rejection, being rejected, and a cry for help...its like a pattern...its very interesting in fact, because it shows that one poem isnt enough for a whole feeling, and sometimes you got to have a bunch of poems to express it, good job
11/12/2001 c1 10jessiCA3
todays people can be very heartless. cruel world out there, huh?*
5/9/2001 c1 Vivian Tse
good msg to convey thru this poem. i agree that nowadays pple just seem to not care at all...where is all the love?
5/8/2001 c1 ssss
Not bad

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