for Bones For Things6/10/2010 c1 
23AvidWriter-92
Hey, there. :)
I really liked this poem. :)
I liked the subtle rhyming that you have going on, but I like the fact that it doesn't really go in order. (It's catchy. :P)
I also liked the way you described things, they were unique, and it make me get a good picture in my head. :)
Great job!
I loved the last few lines... They were really touching. :)
~Avid Roadhouse. :)
23AvidWriter-92Hey, there. :)
I really liked this poem. :)
I liked the subtle rhyming that you have going on, but I like the fact that it doesn't really go in order. (It's catchy. :P)
I also liked the way you described things, they were unique, and it make me get a good picture in my head. :)
Great job!
I loved the last few lines... They were really touching. :)
~Avid Roadhouse. :)
1/14/2010 c1 21RentBoheme
Oh, I really liked the darkness in this poem. It was very effective. I'm not good at critiquing poetry, but one suggestion I have is that it just seems random the way you separate your lines. Like, if I were you, I would give "who / would want to die here?" its own line. And also either move "over head" up a line, or take art of the last line and add it to overhead.
Anyway, though, that's minor. Great job.
21RentBohemeOh, I really liked the darkness in this poem. It was very effective. I'm not good at critiquing poetry, but one suggestion I have is that it just seems random the way you separate your lines. Like, if I were you, I would give "who / would want to die here?" its own line. And also either move "over head" up a line, or take art of the last line and add it to overhead.
Anyway, though, that's minor. Great job.
1/5/2010 c1 1RetardedChicken
oh :O this was dark but I loved it, great writer, I loved the 'meadly tea time and candy' have no idea why :) Great read amd brilliantly written!
1RetardedChickenoh :O this was dark but I loved it, great writer, I loved the 'meadly tea time and candy' have no idea why :) Great read amd brilliantly written!
1/2/2010 c1 2RavenclawRebel
Wow. That's a great poem... Gave me chills! very descriptive, I loved it!
2RavenclawRebelWow. That's a great poem... Gave me chills! very descriptive, I loved it!
12/29/2009 c1 xXhootsXx
I liked it.
It was morbid..yet very refreshing at the same time. The dark overtone was just what I needed! (:
I liked it.
It was morbid..yet very refreshing at the same time. The dark overtone was just what I needed! (:
12/27/2009 c1 6Classy Broad
Oh, morbid, disclored ravaged flesh... black ravens. I know it's weird but I like it.. XD
6Classy BroadOh, morbid, disclored ravaged flesh... black ravens. I know it's weird but I like it.. XD
12/26/2009 c1 119Ezio. The Sentinel
Interesting. I was reminded of a cryptic take on a Train song. Excellent rhyming and pattern. Very unique.
~The Sentinel
119Ezio. The SentinelInteresting. I was reminded of a cryptic take on a Train song. Excellent rhyming and pattern. Very unique.
~The Sentinel
12/26/2009 c1 6Missus Ann
I really liked this~ :'D I don't know what you were talking about, though. D: In this poem, the grammar was almost perfect. C: I said the few things I changed in the PM that I sent you with the edited version. C:
So... so... yeah~ 8D You win~
WOO.
HOO.
OH YEAH. C:
Sorry... I just had thoughts of me eating Captain Crunch, which is currently the only cereal in my house. Eh, it made me happy, so it's all good?
~Ann (a.K.a /not/ the creepy stalker. Heh. Heh heh. I MEAN WHAT)
P.S. I warned you I'm not average. c:
6Missus AnnI really liked this~ :'D I don't know what you were talking about, though. D: In this poem, the grammar was almost perfect. C: I said the few things I changed in the PM that I sent you with the edited version. C:
So... so... yeah~ 8D You win~
WOO.
HOO.
OH YEAH. C:
Sorry... I just had thoughts of me eating Captain Crunch, which is currently the only cereal in my house. Eh, it made me happy, so it's all good?
~Ann (a.K.a /not/ the creepy stalker. Heh. Heh heh. I MEAN WHAT)
P.S. I warned you I'm not average. c:
12/25/2009 c1 12BangxDitto
I really liked this.
...
I now feel super morbid, but I honestly I think this was awesome. And I'd totally do the same for those poor bones.
12BangxDittoI really liked this.
...
I now feel super morbid, but I honestly I think this was awesome. And I'd totally do the same for those poor bones.