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3/1/2010 c2 32she left ringing in his head
heartbreaking.
1/24/2010 c23 12kamburger
This is a stand out one for me.

I'm not sure if these lines agree in number, though:

"Your smiles strike me as an

anesthetic for power"

I think it would make more sense as "Your smile strikes me as an/anesthetic for power" or "Your smiles strike me/as anesthetics for power."

But I like it a lot, especially the last line.
1/11/2010 c2 16Howle
Although I don't really dig the technical part of this poem, I love the implicit humor. Also, some of the repetition went a long way with me. This is good.
1/11/2010 c1 Howle
This particular poem "to me is weak." Sorry, just not enough descriptive magic going on. There were some parts that I liked, like 29 pushing on 47... But most of it is just kindah...blah. i'd work at spicing it up a bit.
1/10/2010 c25 12kamburger
I don't think my last review went through, so I'm trying again.

I really like this poem. Especially the last line: "I became a tree." It makes me think of not getting what you want, and having to experience things second-hand, like a tree that bends in the wind instead of being the wind.
1/5/2010 c8 Gone with the tide
I love your "Like squishing a spider with an ungloved hand." I hate spiders, so I get that it's extremely uncomfortable.
1/2/2010 c21 81Princess-anna57
Great piece, I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing! Write on!

~Anna~ ^_^
12/31/2009 c2 xXhootsXx
These poems are amazing...Good job! I loved reading every single one!

I hope you liked my story okay! KEEP WRITING AND UPDATE YOUR OTHER STORY!
12/31/2009 c21 30YasuRan
I can't even begin to describe how much I loved reading these poems... just gorgeous... each and every one of them. Well done.
12/29/2009 c5 6letyoursoultakeflight
I remember you said that

Would be cool black

They're all black, Lester

- love the converational tone to this poem and the bit of dry humour in it =]
12/29/2009 c4 letyoursoultakeflight
Love the words in this one =]
12/29/2009 c3 letyoursoultakeflight
I feel so disconnected; I've forgotten me.

- powerful =] Love it
12/29/2009 c2 letyoursoultakeflight
Really liked this =]
12/28/2009 c1 1RetardedChicken
nicely written, like the hash brown part... I LIKE! lol anyways, great poem :)

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