for Wordless Horror3/3/2011 c1 
2bookaddict27
Great story! I normally don't like things written in 2nd person, but this was very well done. I liked the descriptions and the pace of it. Aunt Linda's story was great as well. This is definitely a story that will stick with me.
2bookaddict27Great story! I normally don't like things written in 2nd person, but this was very well done. I liked the descriptions and the pace of it. Aunt Linda's story was great as well. This is definitely a story that will stick with me.
5/29/2010 c1 lili999
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12/29/2009 c1 12elisefey
I loved this. It gave me chills.
I only have one suggestion for improvement, this line: "Okay, totally not looking at her now. What has she been doing, reading your mind?" For a moment it took me out of the story because it just wasn't the same careful tone as the rest and I had to concentrate to get back in the right headspace again to finish and really appreciate the ending line. I would just rework that line; otherwise I have nothing to critique. :) Excellent job, I've added it to my C2.
12elisefeyI loved this. It gave me chills.
I only have one suggestion for improvement, this line: "Okay, totally not looking at her now. What has she been doing, reading your mind?" For a moment it took me out of the story because it just wasn't the same careful tone as the rest and I had to concentrate to get back in the right headspace again to finish and really appreciate the ending line. I would just rework that line; otherwise I have nothing to critique. :) Excellent job, I've added it to my C2.