for Things that go Bump in the Night10/9/2011 c19 Capitalz
I read this story way back, glad to see another chapter.
I read this story way back, glad to see another chapter.
9/16/2011 c19 
99Dreamers-Requiem
As always, great chapter. I love the way you slip between the two societies, and the characters remain consistant. love the interactions between the guys and Aimee, and I like how she still has that air of naivity to her. I like the way you use the slang, too. Scene with the army was really good; great descriptions. Really liked the part with the books, magazines and DVDs too, love the way you're using current technology in this. Awww Kieran! So sweet! Anyway, if you can't tell, I'm really enjoying the story and can't wait to see more.
99Dreamers-RequiemAs always, great chapter. I love the way you slip between the two societies, and the characters remain consistant. love the interactions between the guys and Aimee, and I like how she still has that air of naivity to her. I like the way you use the slang, too. Scene with the army was really good; great descriptions. Really liked the part with the books, magazines and DVDs too, love the way you're using current technology in this. Awww Kieran! So sweet! Anyway, if you can't tell, I'm really enjoying the story and can't wait to see more.
7/23/2011 c19 9Mysterious MD
That was a good chapter. It was well written, I don't believe I encountered any spelling or grammar errors. We see both sides here, Aimee learning more about the truth behind everything while Ashleigh and Dmitri are getting involved in a war they don't understand. It is interesting that they were taught two histories the same yet different, it is a good plot concept. It will be unfortunate should Aimee and her friends meet on the battle field. Keep up the good writing, I look forward to reading more.
9Mysterious MDThat was a good chapter. It was well written, I don't believe I encountered any spelling or grammar errors. We see both sides here, Aimee learning more about the truth behind everything while Ashleigh and Dmitri are getting involved in a war they don't understand. It is interesting that they were taught two histories the same yet different, it is a good plot concept. It will be unfortunate should Aimee and her friends meet on the battle field. Keep up the good writing, I look forward to reading more.
7/10/2011 c19 SecretAgent99
RAWR! I want more information on the history of the Ancients! Update soon!
RAWR! I want more information on the history of the Ancients! Update soon!
7/7/2011 c19 appple
I just finished reading all 19 chapters in one night and all I have to say is: that was amazing.
Your plot is intriguing although not quite original. When I first started reading, I thought it was going to be a classic Mary Sue story but as I continued, I pleasantly realized that your characters are well developed. Maybe more on Jonas and Brian though?
There were very few grammar mistakes, but you should consider upping up your word choice.
Overall, a great read.
I just finished reading all 19 chapters in one night and all I have to say is: that was amazing.
Your plot is intriguing although not quite original. When I first started reading, I thought it was going to be a classic Mary Sue story but as I continued, I pleasantly realized that your characters are well developed. Maybe more on Jonas and Brian though?
There were very few grammar mistakes, but you should consider upping up your word choice.
Overall, a great read.
7/6/2011 c19 xbrilliantlymorbidx
Did you use 2ne1 'i am the best' beat for your drum beat? Because it was exact same 8D
Beside that just loving your story! I will wait for what Carson will spill as the true cause O-O
Did you use 2ne1 'i am the best' beat for your drum beat? Because it was exact same 8D
Beside that just loving your story! I will wait for what Carson will spill as the true cause O-O
11/28/2010 c18 99Dreamers-Requiem
I really enjoyed that chapter - it had some great character depth in it, and the scenes written in the Elder society were handled really well. I think you're really good at showing the effects that propaganda and information manipulation can have on people, especially those like Dmitri. So great job with that. Like I said, the character depth was really well written and I think the backstory suited Royce, it makes sense, it doesn't seem false or forced so great job on that. I also like how Aimee found out, following him because she thought he was up to no good and then getting proved wrong. Yeah, great work and can't wait for the next chapter!
99Dreamers-RequiemI really enjoyed that chapter - it had some great character depth in it, and the scenes written in the Elder society were handled really well. I think you're really good at showing the effects that propaganda and information manipulation can have on people, especially those like Dmitri. So great job with that. Like I said, the character depth was really well written and I think the backstory suited Royce, it makes sense, it doesn't seem false or forced so great job on that. I also like how Aimee found out, following him because she thought he was up to no good and then getting proved wrong. Yeah, great work and can't wait for the next chapter!
11/12/2010 c18 1booksarefriends101
Hey its me (aly) lol :)
Okay I may be your 100th review, awesome!
Okay enough about that stuff that is quiet , an more to your story. I love how the elders say Mirantovans are bad and will lie when whose lying right now? The Elders. I ♥ how you describe everything and everyone.
And Royce oh Royce, he may think he's sexy...he might be? But he's even Royce as a dragon all irrogrant and just being Royce. But I have to say I enjoy Royce. Who doesn't? And his jokes-The Spark Notes version. oh dear.
I don't know if you notice but, you spelt Ashleigh- Ashley.
The Elders sort of remind me of the Giver, protecting the society and all. I mean they are SO different but it just st of gives me that reminder which is cool cause I liked the Giver.
Royce's story made me cry.. but i understand now why he's him. And we got to see the tender side of him. :) well I love it, keep writing.I can't wait for more!
If you can read my short story and review it. Thanks
Aly
1booksarefriends101Hey its me (aly) lol :)
Okay I may be your 100th review, awesome!
Okay enough about that stuff that is quiet , an more to your story. I love how the elders say Mirantovans are bad and will lie when whose lying right now? The Elders. I ♥ how you describe everything and everyone.
And Royce oh Royce, he may think he's sexy...he might be? But he's even Royce as a dragon all irrogrant and just being Royce. But I have to say I enjoy Royce. Who doesn't? And his jokes-The Spark Notes version. oh dear.
I don't know if you notice but, you spelt Ashleigh- Ashley.
The Elders sort of remind me of the Giver, protecting the society and all. I mean they are SO different but it just st of gives me that reminder which is cool cause I liked the Giver.
Royce's story made me cry.. but i understand now why he's him. And we got to see the tender side of him. :) well I love it, keep writing.I can't wait for more!
If you can read my short story and review it. Thanks
Aly
11/1/2010 c6 8Kobra Kid
Your characters are all very realistic - especially Kieran! :D. He seems more dark and ominous, which I simply just love! And oh no...Aimee is with Dimitri? I bet she's really happy...hehe :3
As usual, great job with this! There were no abrupt breaks and everything read smoothly. Realistic characters? Check. Great descriptions? Check. Awesome plot? Check.
Yeah, you're good. :) Keep it up!
~Shayyde (formerly B. Cross, just so you know :D)
- You can payback whenever you want. Just make sure its either Rise From The Ashes or Ace Of Spades (: Thank you SO much! :D
8Kobra KidYour characters are all very realistic - especially Kieran! :D. He seems more dark and ominous, which I simply just love! And oh no...Aimee is with Dimitri? I bet she's really happy...hehe :3
As usual, great job with this! There were no abrupt breaks and everything read smoothly. Realistic characters? Check. Great descriptions? Check. Awesome plot? Check.
Yeah, you're good. :) Keep it up!
~Shayyde (formerly B. Cross, just so you know :D)
- You can payback whenever you want. Just make sure its either Rise From The Ashes or Ace Of Spades (: Thank you SO much! :D
10/31/2010 c18 9Mysterious MD
That was an amazing chapter. It was written incredibly, I didn't spot any spelling or grammar errors and it flowed great. There was a lot of information, in that chapter and it was presented very clearly. The Elders reveal the Mirantovans and present them as evil, Aimee gets to see Mirantova, and we find out more about Royce. It was overall an incredible chapter. I can't wait to read the next update, keep up the fantastic writing.
9Mysterious MDThat was an amazing chapter. It was written incredibly, I didn't spot any spelling or grammar errors and it flowed great. There was a lot of information, in that chapter and it was presented very clearly. The Elders reveal the Mirantovans and present them as evil, Aimee gets to see Mirantova, and we find out more about Royce. It was overall an incredible chapter. I can't wait to read the next update, keep up the fantastic writing.
10/31/2010 c18 SecretAgent99
;_; Poor Royce! His backstory is so sad! And I wonder what's up with Keiran and the professor. Update soon!
;_; Poor Royce! His backstory is so sad! And I wonder what's up with Keiran and the professor. Update soon!
8/13/2010 c17 99Dreamers-Requiem
Evil, EVIL Elders! I can't believe they've lied so obviously to everyone about Aimee's disappearence. I really hope Aimee and the unit eventually come back and kick their arses!
As always, the interactions are great, Royce is a wicked character and in his other form, he's even better. He makes me chuckle.
It was good to see some of Aimee's internal conflict over what is going on; poor girl. She must feel so confused.
'"We, the Elders' Council, am here to report the details of Aimee Vaughan's disappearance."'
'are here' maybe? :P
99Dreamers-RequiemEvil, EVIL Elders! I can't believe they've lied so obviously to everyone about Aimee's disappearence. I really hope Aimee and the unit eventually come back and kick their arses!
As always, the interactions are great, Royce is a wicked character and in his other form, he's even better. He makes me chuckle.
It was good to see some of Aimee's internal conflict over what is going on; poor girl. She must feel so confused.
'"We, the Elders' Council, am here to report the details of Aimee Vaughan's disappearance."'
'are here' maybe? :P
8/5/2010 c17 Dork2350
why wud we hate you for royce? i luv that boy! and i particularly love the way you described the surroundings as they flew. cant wait for more and way to build the suspense with the whole 'she is dead' ending
why wud we hate you for royce? i luv that boy! and i particularly love the way you described the surroundings as they flew. cant wait for more and way to build the suspense with the whole 'she is dead' ending
8/5/2010 c16 Dork2350
good work. like usual. i luv the characters and i love ther interactionc. i dont know wat to say other than i luv it
good work. like usual. i luv the characters and i love ther interactionc. i dont know wat to say other than i luv it
8/5/2010 c15 Dork2350
haha i loved this chapter. i forsee a romance on the way and i love kieran and aimee. but i have to admit i was a little confused with how the bird was holding them exactly when they were flying. maybe it was me being stupid but it wouldn't hurt to make that a little clearer. oh and i love wen she first hears kierans unit. i cant wait until they meet. keep up the good work =)
haha i loved this chapter. i forsee a romance on the way and i love kieran and aimee. but i have to admit i was a little confused with how the bird was holding them exactly when they were flying. maybe it was me being stupid but it wouldn't hurt to make that a little clearer. oh and i love wen she first hears kierans unit. i cant wait until they meet. keep up the good work =)