1/22/2010 c1 82steffxnie
Good use of emotive language. A well written heartfelt piece. There's something very deep here, and it's really well expressed. I love the last lines. Great job. Keep it up.
Good use of emotive language. A well written heartfelt piece. There's something very deep here, and it's really well expressed. I love the last lines. Great job. Keep it up.
1/3/2010 c1 18awanida
i like it i dont think you should edit it's pretty good in my opinion leave it as is
i like it i dont think you should edit it's pretty good in my opinion leave it as is
1/3/2010 c1 socks-lost
I know what you're saying about the fictionpress thing.
"I should've realized that I wasn't crying for you,
but for who you had been, a protector, a friend"
Those were my two favorite lines. I really the poem. The emotion here is real. I really like it, keep it up!
I know what you're saying about the fictionpress thing.
"I should've realized that I wasn't crying for you,
but for who you had been, a protector, a friend"
Those were my two favorite lines. I really the poem. The emotion here is real. I really like it, keep it up!