6/11/2010 c7 24jadetryton
that is super good so far! i really like the mute concept. so many people do the blind or deaf, but i like yours! its refreshing! and thanks for defining the "eejit" thing. =]

6/10/2010 c6 xVampireLoveBitesx
EVA ACCEPTANCE! HURRAH!

Not being able to laugh must be the most horrible thing... D:

Man, I love how you describe everyone -just enough to let us know how you feel they're meant to look, but also leaving room for us to personalise the mental image a little :)

I love Cassie -the mega blue eyes and all... Oh and definitely how childishly obvious she is about liking Tom. That is ADORABLE.

I love that Katie one. Daayum, what a babe. ;) OJAAY

Your distinct lack of knowledge of rugby terminology amuses me :3 When they run with the ball and get it over the line, that's scoring a try. when they kick it over the post, that's a conversion. :P

M, i love that phrase; "Playing over like a broken record" I'm not quite sure why but it always fits a situation, no matter what.

It's just the way she's hearing Craig's voice in her head over and over like it's haunting her, though not in such a desolate way lol

Oh god that line made me want to cry -"I'd like to have an inside joke with someone one day."

It's just so lonely D: It's heartbreaking to the likes of me, but Eva just treats it so plainly...

LOL Callie and Tom chillin' at his 'pad' -GET IN THERE BIG LAWD! ;D

AHAHAHAHA HOLLY JUST SAID GET IT OUT FOR THE LADS! AFTER I'D SAID THAT! OH FANTASTIC! XD

Awk wee Eva... Feeling like she's forcing herself on them even when they are the ones askeing her to hang out with them... :'( Poor wee lass

Ohh i got goosebumps when Craig said "I want you to come" -in my head it was more like a sexy murmur... ;)

LOL first line of the very last paragraph -corny as hell, girl -love it! :P

Aww GO EVA! I'm so proud :') SOCIALISATION! hehe :D

Update soon, ho! RAWR!

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4/15/2010 c5 xVampireLoveBitesx
:O DUSTEYES RETURNS!

Aww dude, just last week I was thinkin' I'd love to see a wee update from yah ^_^ You read my mind ;)

Awk i know that feeling -constantly thinking about someone makes you see them everywhere! You just somehow manage to see a little bit of that person in everything..

M, grey swirl eyes and messy hair... :3

*sigh* I feel so bad for Eva :/ She has such a negative view on the weekend... Isn't she normally pretty neutral towards everything though? Like she's not totally 'stoked on life' as it were, but she's hardly a big emo about it either, right?

Or if I'm wrong, are you conveying a more negative attitude that Eva has from time to time?

Whatever the answer, it hardley hinders the storyline because it just makes the contrast between when Eva's alone and when she's with Craig stronger :)

Typo ;) "the rugby practise is being extended" not extending ;D

Aww man, I died a little inside with Eva when she realised Craig was talking to her because of Tom .

AAHAHAHHAHAHAH Tom's an eejit ;)

Bah, Craig's a cheeky little bugger! :P But that kind of cheeky one can't help but love ;)

Feeling wick for Eva for being lured into going to the match though! Surely it won't be that bad...

Eva's in luurve ;)

Well... she just doesn't know it yet. She majorly digs Craig and I l o v e it :3

Man, i feel nervous for Eva about the match even though really, there isn't anything to be afraid of...

Tom's a good brother though. He's so supportive :)

*Just so you know, you don't need the apostrophe in sports (as in where you've written 'sport's bag')

It kills me the way Eva feels like she doesn't belong :( It's like she feels like she doesn't have rights just because she's mute :'(

Ooh caught by Craig ;) She can't get away THAT easily :P

Aww dude i wish it didn't end so abruptly, I'm dying to keep reading here! Give me my update fix soon please! ;)

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2/24/2010 c4 Liveey123348
Oh my! I love craig! (no pun intended) I simply love how you created this story! :) I hope you can update soon! I wonder if Craig will ask Evas brother about her later in the story! :D

KAITLTN

K.I.T

xOxO

1/21/2010 c4 bella
i really like it...and craig seems extremely sweet. keep writing!

1/21/2010 c3 xVampireLoveBitesx
Hey hun, apologies for the late review!

:3 *high fives Eva* I like high fiving people ;)

It's nice to know something is going right for Eva, even though it may seem like something insignificant.

"There was a lonesome practise room at the end, which simply held a lonesome piano."

-Perhaps chop one of the 'lonesome's ? Preferrably the lonesome before the piano -if it's just 'piano' without a replacement adjective, that in itself will make it seem more isolated.

I like disorganised teachers -i agree with Eva's theory; they do generally tend to be nicer! Like my airhead of an art teacher :3

Awk her form teacher is so lovely :)

Ooh not a nice feeling -lunchtime awkwardness :/ poor Eva.. I'd want to leave too...

Practise room. jackpot.

I'd love to spend lunchtimes like that if I were a musician... It's sorta like a haven for Eva, isn't it? :) Peaceful and relaxing. Lovely.

Apologies for shortness of this review -i'm having one of those days *rolls eyes*

Anywho, can't wait for an update honey :)

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1/19/2010 c3 Secret-Stillness
I really like this piece keep up the good work. in the first chapter you might want to explain that Londonderry is in Ireland in a slightly diffrent way it was hard to grasp, other than that this piece is excellent

1/8/2010 c2 xVampireLoveBitesx
Salutations, dearest darling duckie :)

Apologies for taking so long to review after saying i was about to -this week's Kerrang! was amazing. M.

Say.. some parts of Eva's house remind me of another house i know, eh? Eh? ;)

Eva's room! The green, and ah! the birds! Am i correct in saying you mentioned similar plans for your room? It sounds so beautiful.

I really love how thoughtful Eva is -i know everyone can think but because she hasn't the ability to speak it just makes her thoughts so much more... what's the word... graceful? no... that doesn't really make sense... poetic? sort of, but not quite there... Her thoughts are sort of beautiful. I can't really think of how to describe it better, apologies. She just seems like such a free spirit -don't laugh at me but that reminds me of you :)

Hehe, room decorated with a little mess? Definitely you, hon ;D

I've always thought that if i ever was mute, i'd just carry a little pen and notepad with me all the time -i don't think i could be bothered to make the effort to learn sign language XD

Loving the family -especially with the 'unknown dad' mystery- might he ever make an appearance, perhaps? Wait, don't tell me. I want to find out my reading the story. ;)

:( Poor Eva... I suppose i can understand her wanting to be a wall flower in her situation.. :/ I'm sure it'd be really difficult not only to be starting a new school, but also to be starting a new school with a disability... Surely it makes the experience ten times more frightening :(

Whoa -I love the fact that you've completely contradicted an assumption we've all made and had Eva not take music for GCSE! You smart cookie -again though, that's beautiful. Music is so personal to her it's become like a diary...

Am i mis-understanding or did you contradict yourself by accident -you said "it dried in long brown layers, matching the dark, ivory shade of my skin" -if her skin is ivory then surely its super pale...?

Hehehe awkward turtle ;) ...Sexual tension clam :P

Oh man, i felt so terrible for Eva. Everyone reacted just as she thought they would when Tom told them she was mute... oh cringe... :'( my heart is breaking for the poor girl. It all just feels so awkward... which of course it is... BAH!

Honey i know you already know this, but i love your writing style so damn much. Its just so... real. I love it.

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